The following appeared in a memo from the owner of a chain of bicycle stores located throughout India.
For many years all the stores in our chain have stocked a wide variety of both local and imported bicycle (pedal bikes).last years , however ,all of trh five best selling bicycle at our newest store were locally made , in Calcutta. Furthermore ,a recent survey by world new bikes magazine indicate an increasing preference for local bicycles among its subscribers. Since our company can reduce expanses by limiting inventory ,the best way to improve profits in all of ore stores is to discount stocking many of our varieties of imported bicycle and concentrate primarily on bicycle made locally.
The owner of, the chain of bicycle conclude that, they can reduce the expanses by limiting the inventory and improve the profit by giving the discount on the imported bicycle and concentrate on the made bicycle locally. Owner fail to render the strong recommendation which not truly support the conclusion
As the owner stated that, for many years all the stores in our chain have stocked a wide variety of both local and imported bicycle. Owner got the good response for both type of bicycle from many years so that owner keeps both type bicycles in stores. As they have good experience of that both type of cycle demand is same. If not they store not stocked with a wide variety of both type of bicycle for many years. Wide word indicates that both types have demanded ample, but why the owner wants to reduce inventory to reduce the expense is not clear from this statement. This Recommendation is fail to support conclusion
Additionally, owner also provide the information that, last year all of five best selling bicycle at our newest store were locally made in Calcutta. The owner of, chain of bicycle open one more new branch of the bicycle in Calcutta in last year which indicate that, they have good demand of both type of bicycle as well as have good profit from both type bicycle. As author not providing any detail information about 5 selling bicycles were imported or local. If the given that selling bicycle were only the local then it support the conclusion. As it is not giving so, it create lots of space for doubts .
Moreover, recent survey the world New Bikes Magazine indicate an increase preference for local bicycle among its subscribers. Recent survey means how much it recent ,is it of two years back ,or is it one month’s back. This specific information about the time is not provide to study that when actually local bicycle were demanded to its subscribers. One more thing is that. Increase the preferences is true but how much it increases than the imported bicycle is not mention in the survey . if imported bicycle demand is 10 and the local bicycle is 11 then it you can't say that the local bicycle demand is increases more than the imported bicycle .
Since the no need to limit the inventory to reduce the expenses and also no need to discount on imported bicycle. because owner not providing any such recommendation which strongly said that imported bicycle demand is reduce . so all recommendation are weak ,not fully support the conclusion Require more strong recommendation to support the conclusion
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Sentence: The owner of, the chain of bicycle conclude that, they can reduce the expanses by limiting the inventory and improve the profit by giving the discount on the imported bicycle and concentrate on the made bicycle locally.
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Sentence: Owner fail to render the strong recommendation which not truly support the conclusion.
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Sentence: This Recommendation is fail to support conclusion.
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Sentence: The owner of, chain of bicycle open one more new branch of the bicycle in Calcutta in last year which indicate that, they have good demand of both type of bicycle as well as have good profit from both type bicycle.
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Sentence: If the given that selling bicycle were only the local then it support the conclusion.
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Sentence: As it is not giving so, it create lots of space for doubts .
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Sentence: Moreover, recent survey the world New Bikes Magazine indicate an increase preference for local bicycle among its subscribers.
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Sentence: Increase the preferences is true but how much it increases than the imported bicycle is not mention in the survey . if imported bicycle demand is 10 and the local bicycle is 11 then it you can't say that the local bicycle demand is increases more than the imported bicycle .
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Sentence: Since the no need to limit the inventory to reduce the expenses and also no need to discount on imported bicycle. because owner not providing any such recommendation which strongly said that imported bicycle demand is reduce . so all recommendation are weak ,not fully support the conclusion Require more strong recommendation to support the conclusion.
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