Pirouettes Ballet School is the clear choice for any child. Of all the dance schools in Elmtown, Pirouettes has the most intensive program, and our teachers have danced in the most prestigious ballet companies all over the world. Many of our students have gone on to become professional dancers with top dance companies.
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation and the argument on which it is based are reasonable. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
The argument asserts that the Pirouettes Ballet School (PBS) is the best choice for any child as it has an intensive program and experienced teachers. This argument is based on a series of incomplete facts and provides a distorted view of the situation.
Firstly, the argument claims that PBS is the clear choice for any child. This statement is a stretch and fails to take into consideration various compelling factors such as the interest of the child. In case a child is interested in learning some other form of dance, rather than ballet, the argument convincing claiming that the ballet school is the best in town would amount to poor advice. Furthermore, the conditions stated to convince that PBS is the best choice lack substantiation. The author fails to prove that an intensive program would improve the performance of a child. It would on the contrary increase the stress on the child and could have potentially deleterious effects on a child's physical and mental well-being. Without considering these consequences, the author's argument hardly suffices to prove that an intensive program is the best for a child to learn and develop.
Secondly, the author's argument indicating the teachers' expertise and experience fails to substantiate that PBS is the best choice for a child. The argument does not cite any statistics to compare the quality of the school's teachers with teachers in other schools in town. It is highly possible that other teachers may have also danced in prestigious companies. In order to strengthen the argument, the author should cite reliable statistics indicating the qualifications and experience of the school's teachers and compare these with similar statistics of other schools.
Thirdly, the argument provides a generalized statement indicating that many of the school's students have become professional dancers with top dance companies. A few students from the school could never represent the whole group of students studying in the school. Most of the schools have average students studying along with a few outliers. The author should provide statistics indicating the median performance of students in the school to substantiate the argument and make it convincing. Otherwise, there is no way to compare with other schools, since every school would have some of their students dancing for top dance companies.
In summary, the argument relies on a lot of assumptions and fails to cite reliable statistics in many cases, making it weak and unconvincing as it stands. To assess the merits of the argument, the author should provide information of all the dependent factors. Otherwise, the argument gives the impression that it is more of wishful thinking rather than substantiated view, and is open to debate.
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