Unfortunately, in contemporary society, creating an appealing image has become more important than the reality or truth behind that image.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take.
In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
The author asserts that in modern society, an appealing image is more desired than the reality or truth behind that image. In my opinion, it is not always necessary that people reflect a different image primarily to manipulate society, but sometimes their profession places such demands on them.
Many movie actors try to build their image to gain popularity among the masses. In reality, they might have a completely different personality from the one projected on the public platform. Fame and success behooves many TV personalities to become extrovert and gregarious, as their profession ...
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Sentence: They need to project themselves as being sublime and affable personalities, so that public support is receieved and consequently it increase their chances of winning election.
Description: The fragment it increase their is rare
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace increase with verb, past tense
Sentence: However, if a person has build a image for the purpose of decieving society, then such an outlook is more harmful when the reality is revealed.
Description: A verb 'to have', present tense, 3rd person singular is not usually followed by a verb, base: uninflected present, imperative or infinitive
Suggestion: Refer to has and build
Sentence: They need to project themselves as being sublime and affable personalities, so that public support is receieved and consequently it increase their chances of winning election.
Error: receieved Suggestion: received
Sentence: He was an inspiration for many young people and cancer pateints, but after his reality was exposed, he became an anathema for the society and lost all the honor and support given to him by the society.
Error: pateints Suggestion: patients
Sentence: However, if a person has build a image for the purpose of decieving society, then such an outlook is more harmful when the reality is revealed.
Error: decieving Suggestion: deceiving
flaws:
Always put a space after punctuation marks. E-rater is sensitive.
Attribute Value Ideal
Score: 5.0 out of 6
Category: Very Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 2 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 3 2
No. of Sentences: 19 15
No. of Words: 437 350
No. of Characters: 2190 1500
No. of Different Words: 221 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.572 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.011 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.679 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 175 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 121 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 70 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 55 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 23 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.905 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.474 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.313 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.531 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.124 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5