An ailing patient should have easy access to his or her doctor's record of treating similarly afflicted patient.Through gaining such access, the ailing patient may better determine whether the doctor is competent to treat the medical condition.
The client knows best. this platitude is often repeated but, as any customer servant can verify, is even more often wrong. Of course, this phrase is not intended to mean that the client would know more than the professional--which would be simply absurd considering how much more experience the latter has--but that the most important thing in any business is to have a satisfied, happy client--even if this means a client with a suboptimal product or service. it is in this exact same spirit that this policy that patients should be able to evaluate their doctors past success, as it would be an architects or artists portfolio, is proposed. however, healthcare is a unique type of endeavour, and the driving motifs for healthcare are not the same as the ones in, say, a restaurant. In the same way that the most important aspect of building is that the constructs stands irrespectively of the weather, the most important aspect of healthcare is that the patient is cured. health care is about improving the lives of people, and this is the metric we should be using: the best policy is the one that improves the lives of people the most. By passing this policy, I argue that this simple principle would be broken, and that the quality of our health care system would be significantly compromised.
Firstly, the outcome of a patient is not the same as the quality of the treatment. In fact, they might not even be that correlated. For example, in cancer treatments, individual factors such as the motivation of the patient to live and factors of chance such as how quickly the sickness spreads and how quickly the cancer was recognized and unfortunate factors such as how good medicine the patient can afford, have a much larger impact than the quality of the doctors treatment. it is also of human nature, particularly from the perspective of a layman, that the outcomes will be viewed with much greater importance than the treatment itself; many nuances might be overlooked or even misunderstood because of ignorance of the subject matter. even if a person would understand these factors, it is extremely hard to document the quality of the treatment, such as whether the doctor was able to go through the correct procedures and whether the doctor was able to communicate the gravity of the situation without demoralizing the patient. it would thus be unfair to have the doctor responsible for the outcome to which they have, in the end, so little affect, just as it would be unfair to blame a president for stock market plummets.
More importantly, not only would it be unfair, but would serve as a bad incentive to the doctors. The immediate consequence of such a policy would be that many doctors would become selective with their patients, choosing to treat only those that they are certain can survive and get recuperate. this change would be devastating for the most vulnerable group, namely the sickest patients. this group would systematically be avoided by many doctors in an attempt to boost their ‘portfolios’, this new naive and foolish certificate of quality, while they should actually be the ones to receive the most urgent treatment. doctors are decision makers, and the quality of decisions should be evaluated as if at the time the decision was made, that is, using the same information available at that time, not after the facts have happened. we should not impose to the doctors policies that forces them to optimize the outcomes; instead, we should incentivise them to maximize well-being and health of the patients--particularly the most sick.
Of course, one could argue that this will ensure better treatment for the patients since they can monitor the quality of the doctors. this argument has already been addressed by the previous points, but of course, it does resonate with our intuitions that it would hold doctors liable for their actions. Yes, doctors, as any other professionals, should be held accountable. however, the patients are not the best adjudicators for the quality of the treatment or the success of the doctor. In fact, as argued previously, patients might be rather bad at this. instead, the institutions themselves, such as hospitals or doctors unions, should evaluate the performance of the doctors and ensure that everyone can expect quality treatment when in need. these institutions and professionals have the proper information and ability to consider all the nuances of the situations and are thus more appropriate for the task than any patient would be. this solution avoids previously mentioned problems while also attaining the benefits of the proposed motion, making it a credible and preferable alternative.
To conclude, by first instinct we might be inclined to give all the information to the patients so they can make the most informed choice. however, when analysing the proposal deeper, many problems arise, outweighing any possible benefit from opening this information to the wider public. most notably, we would be making a disservice to the sickest and thus most vulnerable by incentivising doctors to avoid such patients to boost their “client portfolio”--with the negative connotation intended. it is thus best to keep this information private and, if more liability is required, to ensure the proper institutions control the quality of the doctors instead of the general public.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, firstly, however, if, look, so, thus, well, while, for example, in fact, of course, such as, in the same way
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 52.0 19.5258426966 266% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 39.0 12.4196629213 314% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 27.0 14.8657303371 182% => OK
Relative clauses : 24.0 11.3162921348 212% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 74.0 33.0505617978 224% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 92.0 58.6224719101 157% => OK
Nominalization: 24.0 12.9106741573 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 4553.0 2235.4752809 204% => Less number of characters wanted.
No of words: 886.0 442.535393258 200% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.1388261851 5.05705443957 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.45579986182 4.55969084622 120% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.96036816765 2.79657885939 106% => OK
Unique words: 375.0 215.323595506 174% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.423250564334 0.4932671777 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 1386.0 704.065955056 197% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 21.0 6.24550561798 336% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 7.0 4.99550561798 140% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.10617977528 258% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 6.0 1.77640449438 338% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 11.0 4.38483146067 251% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 32.0 20.2370786517 158% => OK
Sentence length: 27.0 23.0359550562 117% => OK
Sentence length SD: 75.8894909968 60.3974514979 126% => OK
Chars per sentence: 142.28125 118.986275619 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.6875 23.4991977007 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.25 5.21951772744 81% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 21.0 7.80617977528 269% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 10.2758426966 156% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 5.13820224719 214% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.163707751813 0.243740707755 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0522637303418 0.0831039109588 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0488521706924 0.0758088955206 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.11270483856 0.150359130593 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0397895688138 0.0667264976115 60% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.6 14.1392134831 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 48.8420337079 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 12.1743820225 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.83 12.1639044944 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.63 8.38706741573 103% => OK
difficult_words: 205.0 100.480337079 204% => Less difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.8971910112 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 11.2143820225 114% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.7820224719 119% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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