Although many people think that the luxuries and conveniences of contemporary life are entirely harmless, they in fact, prevent people from developing into truly strong and independent individuals.
In today's world the technology has grown so far that we just have to think about what we want to do, after the rise of internet and smart devices every work can be done using a tip of finger. Although this facilities and luxuries are helping to make work insignificant, but fact to be noted that they are not harmless, I believe that they are more harmful then cancer and hinder one's social and physical progress.
The best example I can give is use of mobile dictionary to save contacts, initially when the Telephone came, there was no facility to save the contact number of others, so people has to remember all important numbers, before the rise of calculators, our ancestors has to calculate on the fingertips and they were very poerful with numbers and calculations, but after that today we are so much dependent on smartphones and technologies, we can't even do simple calculations without paper and we merely take care of remembering some important contact numbers.
Other example which focuses on knowledge extraction is search engine and E-book readers. Initially there were no way to know that which book or website contains which kind of content, topic, chapter; so we have to read it and then we get to know, what was that about and that practice was making one's knowledge diversified, no one is complete, if one will only read what he likes then there is no way that he will explore other possibilities.
Let's talk about some physical conveniences, after the boom of vehicles it is hard to find someone wandering on foot. Current situation is people spend half of the life travelling through personal vehicles, trains, public trasports and when they retire, when they actually want to spend some time with mother nature in public parks or gardens, they are not able to walk properly due to big grown belly and join problems, even today's life expectency is really less, and death by age became so uncommon and the death by decease such as heart-attack became so much common.
Our ancestors told us to do exercise in early morning, so that with some physical strenght we also get some non-toxic air, but we just follow to do excercise, we don't actually care about fresh air intake or may be many people don't even know. We spend hours in gym, which are mostly air-conditioned. Some study suggests that the polluted air on the running streets has less carbon dioxide then in the close air-conditioned room.
There are limitless exaples to discuss, but almost all suggests that we are on the wrong track of evolution, may be not wrong but the different one then what mother nature had planned for us. We were evolved to sustain bigger brain and lost the tail because we were not using it anymore. I think next evolution will lead us to loose the brain as we not using it to survive anymore, we are so much dependent on smartphones, computers, transportaion devices, our very survival will depend upon these things, not on food and water. Although not all luxuries are harmfull somee are harmless and give us right direction towards evolution like solar power, wind power, progress in science. But as it seems to me that we are burning entire forest to save one tree.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'these'?
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Message: Did you mean 'than'?
Suggestion: than
...s, I believe that they are more harmful then cancer and hinder ones social and physi...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... the contact number of others, so people has to remember all important numbers, b...
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Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...ent on smartphones and technologies, we cant even do simple calculations without pap...
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Line 5, column 297, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
...that about and that practice was making ones knowledge diversified, no one is comple...
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Message: Did you mean 'Let's'?
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Line 7, column 99, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[7]
Message: The word 'someone' in subjunctive clause must be used with a base form of a verb: 'wander'.
Suggestion: wander
... of vehicles it is hard to find someone wandering on foot. Current situation is people sp...
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'todays'' or 'today's'?
Suggestion: todays'; today's
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... fresh air intake or may be many people dont even know. We spend hours in gym, which...
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Message: Did you mean 'than'?
Suggestion: than
...running streets has less carbon dioxide then in the close air-conditioned room. T...
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Message: Did you mean 'lose' (= miss, waste, suffer the loss etc.)?
Suggestion: lose
... I think next evolution will lead us to loose the brain as we not using it to survive...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, if, may, really, so, then, as to, i think, kind of, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 30.0 19.5258426966 154% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.4196629213 64% => OK
Conjunction : 27.0 14.8657303371 182% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 11.3162921348 168% => OK
Pronoun: 55.0 33.0505617978 166% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 64.0 58.6224719101 109% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 12.9106741573 54% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2635.0 2235.4752809 118% => OK
No of words: 554.0 442.535393258 125% => OK
Chars per words: 4.75631768953 5.05705443957 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.85151570047 4.55969084622 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57859614438 2.79657885939 92% => OK
Unique words: 289.0 215.323595506 134% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.521660649819 0.4932671777 106% => OK
syllable_count: 833.4 704.065955056 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 6.24550561798 176% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.10617977528 258% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 6.0 1.77640449438 338% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.2370786517 74% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 36.0 23.0359550562 156% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 139.267448538 60.3974514979 231% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 175.666666667 118.986275619 148% => OK
Words per sentence: 36.9333333333 23.4991977007 157% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.33333333333 5.21951772744 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.97078651685 121% => OK
Language errors: 12.0 7.80617977528 154% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 10.2758426966 39% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 5.13820224719 175% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0914764875349 0.243740707755 38% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0310624081098 0.0831039109588 37% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0412679453922 0.0758088955206 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0508243420058 0.150359130593 34% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0349821648448 0.0667264976115 52% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.5 14.1392134831 138% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.4 48.8420337079 89% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.2 12.1743820225 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.92 12.1639044944 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.79 8.38706741573 105% => OK
difficult_words: 118.0 100.480337079 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 11.8971910112 160% => OK
gunning_fog: 16.4 11.2143820225 146% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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