In any field of endeavor, it is impossible to make a significant contribution without first being strongly influenced by past achievements within that field.
n a quickly changing and complex society, research is a crucial factor that has great influence to a nation’s prosperity. Thus, dealing with an argument whether caring about past achievements in order to make a significant contribution in a certain field is debatable. I disagree with the statement that it is impossible for a person to make a significant contribution without informations of past achievements in that field.
Admittedly, there are a few cases that past achievements matter to keep up with the current projects. For instance, in developing COVID-19 vaccines, researchers had to use the records of past vaccine developments to develop a new vaccines promptly. If there were not any of information about the past successful vaccine development records, it would have taken a lot more time to develop an effective vaccine. Thus, by utilizing necessary past achievements, contemporary researchers were able to contribute in the crisis of pandemic.
Although some cases have benefits by applying information achieved in the past, there are many more cases that are unnecessary of informations from the past. Take Facebook, for example. Facebook is a social networking service that had a revolutionary influence on current society. Advent of facebook led many changes in the fields of business, technology, and science. Such an invention was did not need any informations about past success, since it was the first trial in applying of the social network. SNS made a great contribution in the change of society in forming a healthy lifestyle, meaningful connectivity which leads to a betterment of overall social health.
In summary, although there are a few advantages in utilizing past achievements, not all fields are necessary of impact provided by past success since revolution can made solely by novelty. Focus should be on the benefits of overall society due to taking an unpredecented new technology into life.
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- Claim Many problems of modern society cannot be solved by laws and the legal system Reason Laws cannot change what is in people s hearts or minds Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim and the reason 50
- Claim Any piece of information referred to as a fact should be mistrusted since it may well be proven false in the future Reason Much of the information that people assume is factual actually turns out to be inaccurate Write a response in which you discus 50
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: N
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Message: I is a common American expression, in British English it is more common to use: I
Suggestion: I
...bution in a certain field is debatable. I disagree with the statement that it is ...
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Suggestion: done
...ogy, and science. Such an invention was did not need any informations about past su...
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Suggestion:
... a betterment of overall social health. In summary, although there are a few adv...
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Message: The verb 'can' requires base form of the verb: 'make'.
Suggestion: make
...ed by past success since revolution can made solely by novelty. Focus should be on t...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, so, thus, for example, for instance, in summary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.5258426966 72% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 12.4196629213 32% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 14.8657303371 13% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.3162921348 62% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 10.0 33.0505617978 30% => OK
Preposition: 63.0 58.6224719101 107% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 12.9106741573 116% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1631.0 2235.4752809 73% => OK
No of words: 306.0 442.535393258 69% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.33006535948 5.05705443957 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18244613648 4.55969084622 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.19759677636 2.79657885939 114% => OK
Unique words: 167.0 215.323595506 78% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.545751633987 0.4932671777 111% => OK
syllable_count: 526.5 704.065955056 75% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 6.24550561798 32% => OK
Article: 0.0 4.99550561798 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.2370786517 74% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.7277678159 60.3974514979 64% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.733333333 118.986275619 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.4 23.4991977007 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.2 5.21951772744 80% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.29297785665 0.243740707755 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0938531737321 0.0831039109588 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.101295585438 0.0758088955206 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.181041698958 0.150359130593 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.115556582517 0.0667264976115 173% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 14.1392134831 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 48.8420337079 87% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.1743820225 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.63 12.1639044944 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.12 8.38706741573 109% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 100.480337079 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 11.8971910112 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.7820224719 119% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.