the best way for a society to prepare its young citizen in political world is by instilling co-operative sense, not competition.
Young people are the backbone for the country. For young people in the political world to be co-operative or competitive is a debatable topic. I think society should provide the young people a competitive environment because it leads to better outcome and the best one wins.
Let's take an example, consider a young citizen who is passionate about the politics and interested in helping people, who wants to pursue his or her dream of reaching the apex in politics. If society gives that person co-operation rather that competition, the citizen wouldn't know the difficulty to reach to a position which he or she reached with co-operation. Providing only co-operation will make the aspiring citizen to look into the good parts of the politics. But giving him or her a fight to get to a position in politics will know how tough it is to reach that position and aids the citizen to achieve more and knows the value of his or her position. Giving a competitive environment sets the aspiring citizen to a better path of analyzing all possible moves of the politicians and would be able to see the positive and negative points of that particular world. This could reach to a better understanding for citizen.
Sure, giving only competitiveness will bring him down and that will discourage the young citizen. But co-operating also implement a bad influence on this person. By co-operating the citizen could easily win and he or she will take that success to be granted and will not work harder than expected or as projected. Instead, giving a competitive environment will give the person strength and courage to do his tasks and will know the value of the position he or she will achieve.
Therefore, providing a competitive environment by the society will nurture and aid the young aspiring citizen, and will help him or her in pursuing their goals. So, I do not agree to the point concluded in the issue given.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: Let's
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, look, so, therefore, i think
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 19.5258426966 36% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.4196629213 121% => OK
Conjunction : 24.0 14.8657303371 161% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.3162921348 80% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 29.0 33.0505617978 88% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 58.6224719101 61% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 12.9106741573 116% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1588.0 2235.4752809 71% => OK
No of words: 328.0 442.535393258 74% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.84146341463 5.05705443957 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25567506705 4.55969084622 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82665854195 2.79657885939 101% => OK
Unique words: 160.0 215.323595506 74% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.487804878049 0.4932671777 99% => OK
syllable_count: 504.0 704.065955056 72% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 6.24550561798 48% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.38483146067 23% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.2370786517 74% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.2368293571 60.3974514979 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.866666667 118.986275619 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.8666666667 23.4991977007 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.86666666667 5.21951772744 55% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.250000522147 0.243740707755 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.1028426435 0.0831039109588 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0724430299607 0.0758088955206 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.163866380667 0.150359130593 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.080474808127 0.0667264976115 121% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 14.1392134831 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 48.8420337079 120% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.1743820225 85% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.79 12.1639044944 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.66 8.38706741573 91% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 100.480337079 62% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 11.8971910112 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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