The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
Competition brings in the good in people but if one needs the best and also to go far, cooperation should be employed. This prompts recommends that the accurate way to ready young people for the roles of leadership in government or other related field is by driving them through a sense of cooperation rather than competition. In my opinion i agree with this suggestion and argue that cooperation is indeed important to be instilled in young people rather than competition for three reasons.
To begin with, competition leads to hatred within communities or people, these can escalate to other detrimental things like feud, and even a melee. For instance, during the election in Nigeria, we had two main parties which compete for the presidential role. During this election, a lot of people lost their lives due to fights between the two parties and other egregious acts done by the parties. The sense of competing within them blocked their human-kind nature which resulted to not being empathetic towards their fellow competitor. The above example illustrates that competition leads to hatred within people, but if cooperation were to be employed instead, we would have a free and fair election without harming people.
Further, a tree in the bush can't build a forest. Young people have a lot of great ideas and skills within them to be explored. Competition within themselves would lead to hoarding of ideas without sharing with people. For example, a guy who is good in developing a software and another who is excellent in graphics and UI/UX design competed for a role and the software developer got the job. In the long run, the guy had a good software but the interface was bad, so he couldn't perform well and sell his applications properly. But with a sense of cooperation with the graphics designer, they would have performed better as a team and developed great applications with enthralling interfaces. In other words, cooperation is very important to build a reliable and strong team.
Finally, it is evident that competition is quite important also in some areas like school environment where students need to come out best by having better grades than their fellow students. However, building a sense of cooperation in them from the scratch would also allow them to work as a team even after graduation rather than having a sense of hatred which is not beneficial after leaving school. It is important to perpetuate the act of cooperation in young ones rather than competition.
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...er than competition for three reasons. To begin with, competition leads to hatr...
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... fair election without harming people. Further, a tree in the bush cant build a...
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...eople. Further, a tree in the bush cant build a forest. Young people have a lot...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, however, if, so, still, well, for example, for instance, in my opinion, in other words, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.5258426966 82% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.4196629213 56% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 14.8657303371 121% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.3162921348 88% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 33.0505617978 82% => OK
Preposition: 67.0 58.6224719101 114% => OK
Nominalization: 24.0 12.9106741573 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2077.0 2235.4752809 93% => OK
No of words: 417.0 442.535393258 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.98081534772 5.05705443957 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.5189133491 4.55969084622 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76043039428 2.79657885939 99% => OK
Unique words: 211.0 215.323595506 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.505995203837 0.4932671777 103% => OK
syllable_count: 633.6 704.065955056 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.99550561798 120% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.10617977528 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.2370786517 89% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 23.0359550562 100% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.2391795818 60.3974514979 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.388888889 118.986275619 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.1666666667 23.4991977007 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.72222222222 5.21951772744 129% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 7.80617977528 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.246745142884 0.243740707755 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0766378381722 0.0831039109588 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0651168392211 0.0758088955206 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.159000174259 0.150359130593 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.079025700112 0.0667264976115 118% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 14.1392134831 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 48.8420337079 116% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.1743820225 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.9 12.1639044944 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.92 8.38706741573 94% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 100.480337079 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 11.8971910112 126% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.2143820225 100% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 62.5 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.75 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.