The claim informs us that a good leader is created by cooperation and not competition. While cooperation is required for achieving mammoth tasks, it is not without competition that talent for completing such tasks is picked up. The claim provides more than required weightage to a sense of cooperation only. Moreover there are many points that need to be discussed that may change one's opinion about the claim.
First and foremost, a good leader is one who leads by example and in order to do that a leader should have the necessary pre-requiste skills in his/her kitty. Every good leader has to go through the hot flames of fire before they can actually take up a position of responsibility. As an example, the current prime minister of Inida, Narendra Modi would not have come up if it were only for sense of cooperation. Stiff competition from opposition parties were met by him at every step of his ladder to the topmost position in India. Moreover, in these days of tough competition, he picked up skills of negotiation, decision making and a plethora of other skills that make him the leader he is.
Secondly, a sense of competition drives an individuals to achieve their goal. They are more focused, time-managed and confident after having been through cut throat competition. An example is getting admissions to prestigious colleges around the world which are know to produce world leaders. These individuals are put through tough competitions in the form of exams like GRE and GMAT. A student who only has a sense of cooperation will be complacent and will not be able to stand a chance and actually reach a leadership role very soon. Adding another example to the above is of Steve Jobs, he had to face fierce competition from Microsoft in order to make his company big. It is not only through sense of cooperation that Apple and Steve Jobs became big but also because of the competition it faced by them from Market that made them the leaders they are.
Finally, Cooperation does lead to a well built team that sticks together and efficiently executes tasks to achieve targets. Without cooperation of the team, a leader cannot be made. Also, people in the team have to assume different roles and often someone has to lead the team from the front. Within the team if there is no competition then individuals become laid back and the final outcome may not create leaders that can stand up to challenges.
In conclusion, competition and cooperation are two crucial elements that should be equally there in sculpting the characteristics of a great leader. Both are like the crucial pillars in the formation of a leader.
- Argument Topic: "The following is taken from a memo from the advertising director of the Super Screen Movie Production Company. "According to a recent report from our marketing department, during the past year, fewer people attended Super Screen-produced 66
- Governments should invest as much in the arts as they do in the military.Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and suppor 73
- "The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition." - Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or dis 16
- TOEFL integrated writing Altruism 61
- A nation should require all of its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college. 58
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 309, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Moreover,
...ightage to a sense of cooperation only. Moreover there are many points that need to be d...
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Line 1, column 382, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
...at need to be discussed that may change ones opinion about the claim. First and f...
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Line 5, column 41, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'an individual' or simply 'individuals'?
Suggestion: an individual; individuals
...Secondly, a sense of competition drives an individuals to achieve their goal. They are more fo...
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Line 5, column 263, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'known'.
Suggestion: known
...ous colleges around the world which are know to produce world leaders. These individ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, finally, first, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, then, well, while, as to, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 19.5258426966 128% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.4196629213 89% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 14.8657303371 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.3162921348 124% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 33.0505617978 100% => OK
Preposition: 74.0 58.6224719101 126% => OK
Nominalization: 24.0 12.9106741573 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2188.0 2235.4752809 98% => OK
No of words: 451.0 442.535393258 102% => OK
Chars per words: 4.85144124169 5.05705443957 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.60833598836 4.55969084622 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76007529679 2.79657885939 99% => OK
Unique words: 233.0 215.323595506 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.516629711752 0.4932671777 105% => OK
syllable_count: 694.8 704.065955056 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.740449438202 0% => OK
Article: 8.0 4.99550561798 160% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.2370786517 109% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 33.0810737132 60.3974514979 55% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 99.4545454545 118.986275619 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.5 23.4991977007 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.31818181818 5.21951772744 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.83258426966 186% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0749009125278 0.243740707755 31% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0219330921385 0.0831039109588 26% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0253895244237 0.0758088955206 33% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0386807735632 0.150359130593 26% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0298457083613 0.0667264976115 45% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 14.1392134831 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 48.8420337079 122% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.1743820225 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.85 12.1639044944 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.85 8.38706741573 94% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 100.480337079 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.8971910112 71% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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