The article states that Altruism is a behavior in which animal sacrifices its own interests for that of another animal or group of animals and provides three examples to support this. However, the professor explains that recent researches have shown the altruistic behavior to be for some selfish reasons instead and refutes the author's example and reasons.
First, the reading claims the unselfish acts among humans such as sharing food or donation of body organs to family members or even strangers to be altruistic. The professor counters this claim by saying that the person donating a kidney could get appreciation and approval from society and there might be an increase in his self worth which could be the vested interest behind this act.
Second, the article posits that meerkat, a mammal that dwells in burrows in grassland areas of Africa, perform the act of putting themselves in danger for the group by standing guard. While the group searches for food, this meerkat defends the group against predators. The article states is as an example of an animal willing to sacrifice food. The professor counter claims this by saying that recent research shows that the meerkat standing guard has actually already had its share of meal. It means it already has a full stomach while it guards for the group.
Third, the article suggests that the meerkat puts itself in danger for the sake of their group. The professor opposes this point by mentioning that when the meerkat has already sensed danger, it has better capability and more time to save itself. Infact, she mentions that when the meerkat raises alarm, it leads to regrouping of the group or movement of the group that attracts more attention to them than to the meerkat that is standing guard.
Therefore, we learn that these acts are not exactly altruistic as mentioned in the article and there is some reason for the behavior exhibited by the animal.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, first, however, if, second, so, therefore, third, well, while, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 10.4613686534 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 5.04856512141 59% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 7.30242825607 151% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 12.0772626932 149% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 22.412803532 161% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 30.3222958057 115% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 5.01324503311 80% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1605.0 1373.03311258 117% => OK
No of words: 323.0 270.72406181 119% => OK
Chars per words: 4.96904024768 5.08290768461 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23936324884 4.04702891845 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.36322909744 2.5805825403 92% => OK
Unique words: 172.0 145.348785872 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.532507739938 0.540411800872 99% => OK
syllable_count: 471.6 419.366225166 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 3.25607064018 184% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Interrogative: 0.0 0.116997792494 0% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.23620309051 121% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 2.5761589404 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 13.0662251656 99% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 21.2450331126 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.3997163667 49.2860985944 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.461538462 110.228320801 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.8461538462 21.698381199 115% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.15384615385 7.06452816374 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.09492273731 122% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 4.19205298013 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 4.33554083885 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 4.45695364238 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.27373068433 94% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0114605055744 0.272083759551 4% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.00411786581372 0.0996497079465 4% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0142647056162 0.0662205650399 22% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.00760845115736 0.162205337803 5% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0152169023147 0.0443174109184 34% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 13.3589403974 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 53.8541721854 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.0289183223 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.84 12.2367328918 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.59 8.42419426049 102% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 63.6247240618 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.7273730684 121% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.498013245 110% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.2008830022 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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