Today's followers can be tomorrow's leaders. Everyone starts their journey by being a fresher in his or her field and working under the experts or leaders in their sector. In this scenario, given prompt suggests that the best way to prepare the young generation for leadership in various fields is by encouraging them to be cooperative instead of competitive. I mostly disagree with this stance because of following two reasons. However, I do concede that cooperation is inevitably necessary for smooth functioning of the team.
Leaders should be competitive inorder to drive their team to success. Leaders are the driving force of their team, whom they look up to, and the motivation to achieve a goal can be only strengthen by the leader's attitute towards the task. For instance, in the field of cricket, the team captain needs to be strategic and competitive while making decisions for the team so that they achieve victory. Another example can be of a manager in a certain company who has to be exacting from his or her employees to lead their firm to success and prosperity. The above scenarios illustrate why the competitive side of leader is essential in leading their team to success.
Leaders should take inspiration from its contemporaries and do thier best to achieve success. Whenever someone tries to compare theirselves to their potential opponents they gain insight on the alternative strategies they can try to implement. For example a government body operating in a certain area can draw inspiration from another working in a different area about how they significantly reduced problems of water shortage in that area. Constantly trying to be better than their fellows can bring out the best in the government bodies which will eventually be beneficial to the people they are catering to.
To conclude, there is no denying in the fact that when leading a group of people, a leader should ensure cooperation within their group. It ensures smooth functioning of the team where in everyone is working in cohesion. However, one of the primary qualities with which a leader can do wonders for their team and lead them to achieve wonders is their competitive spirit.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 95, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Whenever” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...s and do thier best to achieve success. Whenever someone tries to compare theirselves to...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, look, so, then, while, as to, for example, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.5258426966 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.4196629213 89% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 14.8657303371 61% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.3162921348 97% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 33.0505617978 103% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 58.6224719101 102% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 12.9106741573 77% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1825.0 2235.4752809 82% => OK
No of words: 362.0 442.535393258 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.04143646409 5.05705443957 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.36191444098 4.55969084622 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80439534534 2.79657885939 100% => OK
Unique words: 190.0 215.323595506 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.524861878453 0.4932671777 106% => OK
syllable_count: 562.5 704.065955056 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 6.24550561798 48% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.2370786517 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.9401133819 60.3974514979 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.352941176 118.986275619 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.2941176471 23.4991977007 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.0 5.21951772744 77% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.175954647519 0.243740707755 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0612242702477 0.0831039109588 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0816212260376 0.0758088955206 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.116350897372 0.150359130593 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0599289252505 0.0667264976115 90% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 14.1392134831 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 48.8420337079 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.1743820225 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.95 12.1639044944 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.3 8.38706741573 99% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 100.480337079 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 11.8971910112 59% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.