The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.
The contention that social must instill its younger people with cooperative rather competition. There are several nuances that a society need to consider to pursue highest outcome. The prompts recommends that society instill younger a sense of cooperative and not competitive for leadership in government , industry and other fields. In my opinion, I strongly disagree with this suggestion and argue that we instill in our younger a sense of competition to prepare them for leadership in society, government, other fields for two reasons.
To begin, Competition is an integral part of our society. From the starting of school life a younger go through with competition. For instance, When a young boy or girl starts school, they are on with competition. In every class they need to hard work to compete with their peers. A student must attend school exam from their childhood period. In a class there many students. So everybody needs to compete each to gain first position. It is not a easy though. They can not use trickery in their class, they must need hard work to compete. They learn more about this world through competition with each other. If they are instilling with only cooperation, they may get a good job. The reputed company always hire who has the ability to compete with others. This is common scenario right now. So it is obviously argue that competition is more preferable rather than instilling cooperation.
Further, to make more clear , we are discussing more about this competition, In a election there are many candidate who wanted to win an election. Everyone want to develop their society through good work. They give a good working prosper to attention the voters. Everyone go door to door to want a vote to win. One candidate always tries to denigrate other candidate. This situation depicts a sense of competition. We never see a cooperation between them. They always try to trickery with other not cooperation. Their competitive situation make them more leadership sense. They can handle anything in society easily through their keen competitive knowledge. Leadership do not come from cooperation in between younger. They need more competitive situation more to instilling a leadership between them. So society must need competition rather than cooperation.
Of course, some argue that cooperative is important for a person to work in a office. They easily can communicate with each other through by cooperation between them. They come closer to each when they are facing a problem. This may seem logical in some cases but in the real scenario is just contrary. How can we get the job ? How can we enter a reputed company without competition? The answer is very complex. People must need competitive situation rather than cooperation.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 146, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[3]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'consider pursuing'.
Suggestion: consider pursuing
... several nuances that a society need to consider to pursue highest outcome. The prompts recommends...
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Line 1, column 158, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[2]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'pursue the highest'.
Suggestion: pursue the highest
...nces that a society need to consider to pursue highest outcome. The prompts recommends that so...
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Line 1, column 194, Rule ID: AGREEMENT_SENT_START[1]
Message: You should probably use 'recommend'.
Suggestion: recommend
... to pursue highest outcome. The prompts recommends that society instill younger a sense of...
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Line 1, column 305, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...competitive for leadership in government , industry and other fields. In my opinio...
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Line 3, column 446, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
... each to gain first position. It is not a easy though. They can not use trickery ...
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Line 3, column 811, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'argued'.
Suggestion: argued
... scenario right now. So it is obviously argue that competition is more preferable rat...
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Line 5, column 28, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...peration. Further, to make more clear , we are discussing more about this compe...
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Line 5, column 81, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...cussing more about this competition, In a election there are many candidate who w...
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Line 5, column 102, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun candidate seems to be countable; consider using: 'many candidates'.
Suggestion: many candidates
...is competition, In a election there are many candidate who wanted to win an election. Everyone...
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Line 5, column 107, Rule ID: THERE_RE_MANY[3]
Message: Possible agreement error. Did you mean 'candidates'?
Suggestion: candidates
...mpetition, In a election there are many candidate who wanted to win an election. Everyone...
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Line 5, column 276, Rule ID: PHRASE_REPETITION[1]
Message: This phrase is duplicated. You should probably leave only 'door to'.
Suggestion: door to
...er to attention the voters. Everyone go door to door to want a vote to win. One candidate alway...
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Line 7, column 77, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...ve is important for a person to work in a office. They easily can communicate wit...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, may, so, still, for instance, of course, in my opinion, in some cases
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.5258426966 72% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 12.4196629213 145% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 14.8657303371 34% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.3162921348 88% => OK
Pronoun: 49.0 33.0505617978 148% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 68.0 58.6224719101 116% => OK
Nominalization: 31.0 12.9106741573 240% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2317.0 2235.4752809 104% => OK
No of words: 454.0 442.535393258 103% => OK
Chars per words: 5.10352422907 5.05705443957 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61598047577 4.55969084622 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81101487956 2.79657885939 101% => OK
Unique words: 207.0 215.323595506 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.455947136564 0.4932671777 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 720.0 704.065955056 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 19.0 6.24550561798 304% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.38483146067 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 39.0 20.2370786517 193% => OK
Sentence length: 11.0 23.0359550562 48% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 34.2897695701 60.3974514979 57% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 59.4102564103 118.986275619 50% => More chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 11.641025641 23.4991977007 50% => More words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 2.17948717949 5.21951772744 42% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 12.0 7.80617977528 154% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 10.2758426966 136% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 5.13820224719 136% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 18.0 4.83258426966 372% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.278775597083 0.243740707755 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0648950309102 0.0831039109588 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0953219554975 0.0758088955206 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.215422341747 0.150359130593 143% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.168741289168 0.0667264976115 253% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.4 14.1392134831 59% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.31 48.8420337079 123% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 12.1743820225 62% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.12 12.1639044944 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.93 8.38706741573 83% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 100.480337079 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.8971910112 71% => OK
gunning_fog: 6.4 11.2143820225 57% => Gunning_fog is low.
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.