The issue claims that society should be instilling a sense of cooperation but not a competition in the young people to prepare them for leadership in government, industry, or any other field. We shall now discuss the most compelling reasons for taking a stand on this claim and develop them to have an effect over the claim. I mostly disagree with this claim of instilling cooperation but not a competition in young people. The below paragraph explains the reasons and examples supporting my take on this claim.
Definitely, cooperation between the individuals is needed for the betterment of the society which they are living in. But, I feel that healthy competition between people makes it more lively and a great place to live. To support this let us look into an example of a school which conducts a science exhibition of building robocars which automatically traces a path drawn on the ground. When the students are tested for their cooperation, they form a group and build a prototype and it fares well. But when they are to compete against other students, they think to work in a way to beat the other students in the competition thereby optimizing their models as good as they can - ultimately the student who designs a model better than all the other contestants wins. In this example as we have seen- in the first case, when they were competing as a team, there was a very little room for optimization, as they have no one to compete against, all their focus would be only on catering the need. But as we have seen in the second case when they are asked to compete against others, they would start thinking in new ways, out of the box. They keep pondering over the models that their peers would be building, ultimately enhancing their level of thinking in other dimensions. Which when true seriously undermines the claim as the is no room for the betterment and things will be even more stagnant as everything is absolute. But the real magic starts happening when it is relative. When we try to be better than the other in the room, we, in turn, augment ourselves better than us.
So from the above examples, it can be concluded that competition is more important than cooperation for the bettering of society. Whereas, some people may argue that cooperation increases the ability to work collectively, corroborating and complementing each other as no one can be good in all the areas. It also holds some water, hence we can finally conclude that while competition is essential for the growth of critical thinking in young people, cooperation should also be instilled in their minds for the ultimate betterment of the society. So Cooperation should be taught when the young people are saturated in their thinking levels and they are going to join the industry/society like right after college.
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- "The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition." - Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or dis 62
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, hence, look, may, second, so, still, well, whereas, while, i feel
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.5258426966 118% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.4196629213 113% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 14.8657303371 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 11.3162921348 168% => OK
Pronoun: 47.0 33.0505617978 142% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 57.0 58.6224719101 97% => OK
Nominalization: 22.0 12.9106741573 170% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2326.0 2235.4752809 104% => OK
No of words: 483.0 442.535393258 109% => OK
Chars per words: 4.81573498965 5.05705443957 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.68799114503 4.55969084622 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73653885434 2.79657885939 98% => OK
Unique words: 235.0 215.323595506 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.486542443064 0.4932671777 99% => OK
syllable_count: 716.4 704.065955056 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 6.24550561798 144% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.2370786517 94% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 23.0359550562 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.5914058517 60.3974514979 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.421052632 118.986275619 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.4210526316 23.4991977007 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.84210526316 5.21951772744 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.97078651685 60% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 0.0 7.80617977528 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 10.2758426966 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.168285686462 0.243740707755 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0623679745851 0.0831039109588 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0735582337601 0.0758088955206 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.12728304182 0.150359130593 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.044128898377 0.0667264976115 66% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 14.1392134831 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 48.8420337079 112% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.1743820225 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.97 12.1639044944 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.72 8.38706741573 92% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 100.480337079 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.8971910112 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.2143820225 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum four paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 62.5 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.75 Out of 6
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