Both competition and cooperation must exist in balanced and healthy proportions for a society to function at its best. Although, competition apparently brings the best out of people, it doesn't always lead to a healthy uprising. Hence I feel that an instillment of cooperation, not competition would prepare a society's young people for leadership in various fields.
Cooperation, coordination, and expansiveness are some of the quintessential qualities a great leader must possess. It is only through these qualities, a leader can be able to communicate and socialize with his sub-ordinates. An amiable leader would be preferred more than an antagonizing tyrant. Only through well-developed coordination and communication, the problems of a society or an industry could be well addressed. For instance, Mahatma Gandhi, the father of the nation of India, is looked upon by many as a great leader with spectacular cooperation. During the time of independence of India, there were many leaders who strived hard for freedom in different parts of the country. But, in the end, it was Mahatma Gandhi who brought all the leaders together to make way for a unified independence struggle, which ultimately turned out to be a success.
Competition, on the other hand, though it tries to bring the best out of an individual, does not necessarily bode well for the long term functioning of a society. A bunch of highly productive individuals without any qualities of cooperation can never work together in an amicable fashion. Competition if not healthy might also create divisions amongst the people of the society or a workplace. We have all heard of this famous quote: "The united we stand, the divided we fall". People of a society can stand united only if a sense of cooperation exists among its people. There were many instances in the history where competition has led to discord among society. The two worlds wars serve as the best example of the above, with many superpowers all around the world fighting for resources and wealth. This has led to large scale destruction and warfare.
All though unhealthy competition isn't favorable in any circumstances, a healthy form of competition with a sense of cooperation would always try to bring the best out the society. The whole concept of free-market economy works because of competition, as only through competition, different companies and individuals can produce and deliver high-quality goods.
To conclude, A healthy competition with a blend of cooperation and sociability would serve as the best mechanism for a society to function at its best and as well prepare its younger generations to take the responsibilities of leadership in the future.
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- The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree 16
- The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree 16
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, apparently, but, hence, if, look, so, still, well, for instance, i feel, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 19.5258426966 51% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.4196629213 97% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 14.8657303371 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.3162921348 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 17.0 33.0505617978 51% => OK
Preposition: 67.0 58.6224719101 114% => OK
Nominalization: 26.0 12.9106741573 201% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2282.0 2235.4752809 102% => OK
No of words: 435.0 442.535393258 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.24597701149 5.05705443957 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56690854021 4.55969084622 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.18976928449 2.79657885939 114% => OK
Unique words: 221.0 215.323595506 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.508045977011 0.4932671777 103% => OK
syllable_count: 715.5 704.065955056 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 11.0 4.99550561798 220% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.2370786517 104% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.6586408268 60.3974514979 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.666666667 118.986275619 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.7142857143 23.4991977007 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.57142857143 5.21951772744 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 7.80617977528 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.198507094172 0.243740707755 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0583300256901 0.0831039109588 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0615436400066 0.0758088955206 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.123940062502 0.150359130593 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0560047774998 0.0667264976115 84% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 14.1392134831 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 48.8420337079 105% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.1743820225 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.17 12.1639044944 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.48 8.38706741573 101% => OK
difficult_words: 106.0 100.480337079 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.8971910112 88% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 75.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.5 Out of 6
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