The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.
The author of the sentence argues that people should be encouraged since the youngest ages to boost their sense of cooperation rather than competition. As a matter of fact the former will give them a substantial help in the working scene when they will reach the highest positions. As far as I am concerned, I tend to totally agree with author's view for at least two main reasons that will be explained better in this essay.
First, once you have reached a top position either in a company or in politcs you must be able to collaborate. Otherwise, people under your power will collaborate between themselves, making a stronger party than you alone and will take the lead. For this reason, cooperation is firstly a way to manage and protect the position you have gained.
Furthermore, collaboration in big firms is fundamental to improve employees' motivation. As a matter of fact, workers who operate in teams usually achieve higher results than the ones who works individually and, thus, they can feel more involved in their company's work seeing that step by step improvements depend also on their personal work.
In addition, cooperation is not a natural skill and it is difficult to develop in the older ages, we have the need to promote it among the youngest using the education. Therefore we have the need to start educating them since the kindergarten, giving award more to children who achieve result laying one on another than to other ones who achieve them individually.
On the other side of the argument, it can be argued that to reach a top position, we must be competitive. However, the competition and the need to be better than other is an innate skill of human beings and, beacuse of that, it is not worthy to include it in education.
In conclusion, since sense of cooperation is even more needed in our society, we must promote it in the education of the youngest as soon as possible in order to achieve fundamental improvments in the society of the future.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 153, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...of cooperation rather than competition. As a matter of fact the former will give t...
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Line 7, column 170, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
...among the youngest using the education. Therefore we have the need to start educating the...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, so, therefore, thus, at least, in addition, in conclusion, as a matter of fact
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 19.5258426966 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.4196629213 113% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 14.8657303371 47% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.3162921348 88% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 33.0505617978 103% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 58.6224719101 87% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 12.9106741573 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1647.0 2235.4752809 74% => OK
No of words: 343.0 442.535393258 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.80174927114 5.05705443957 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.30351707066 4.55969084622 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7624210557 2.79657885939 99% => OK
Unique words: 186.0 215.323595506 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.542274052478 0.4932671777 110% => OK
syllable_count: 524.7 704.065955056 75% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.2370786517 64% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 23.0359550562 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.731001673 60.3974514979 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.692307692 118.986275619 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.3846153846 23.4991977007 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.69230769231 5.21951772744 186% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.97078651685 121% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.83258426966 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.122231638856 0.243740707755 50% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0448893779187 0.0831039109588 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0399901990127 0.0758088955206 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0601305114131 0.150359130593 40% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0297908904052 0.0667264976115 45% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 14.1392134831 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 48.8420337079 110% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.1743820225 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.86 12.1639044944 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.56 8.38706741573 102% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 100.480337079 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.2143820225 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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