Sense of cooperation should be ingrained in young people for leadership in government, industry or other fields. It's the sense of cooperation which can provide fruitful results efficiently and in time. But sense of competition is equally important for various reasons like growing up the ladder, to avoid complacency. Further I would discuss how cooperation helps and why competition is also necessary.
Working together as a team cooperatively can produce productive results in less time as compared to working with no cooperation. Imagine if in one political party there is lot of schism and most of their time goes in fighting and arguing over pity things, there will be less time for them to do anything substantial for the public. Cooperation is required in every field be it in office, fields, politics. For e.g in office if a person is leading a project, it's important for him to cooperate with other team mates too so that he can take their help if needed. Therefore, it's really important for young people to have the ability to listen, understand and cooperate where ever they can.
In contrary to what is said in the credo, it's important to have the sense of competition too. If there wouldn't be any competition people might become complacent; they wouldn't do anything extra; they wouldn't push themselves to do outstanding things. For a person to become a leader he will have to show his credentials which should be better than others. The person will work towards them only if he has the sense that there are other people he will have to compete with to prove his worth. In addition to this, competition is important for innovation too. When scientists work on a problem, they can work as a team and get good results but if there is a sense of competition then they might push themselves even harder to achieve a task. Therefore, competition is as important as cooperation.
Conclusively, for a society to prepare it's young minds it's important to instill in them a sense of competition too with cooperation in order for them to be true leaders. So that the results they can produce as a leader are more fruitful because of the extra efforts they will put in order to prove themselves worthy as compared to others.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'if', 'really', 'so', 'still', 'then', 'therefore', 'in addition']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.203836930456 0.240241500013 85% => OK
Verbs: 0.163069544365 0.157235817809 104% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0815347721823 0.0880659088768 93% => OK
Adverbs: 0.052757793765 0.0497285424764 106% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0743405275779 0.0444667217837 167% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.139088729017 0.12292977631 113% => OK
Participles: 0.0263788968825 0.0406280797675 65% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.79438125947 2.79330140395 100% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0479616306954 0.030933414821 155% => OK
Particles: 0.00479616306954 0.0016655270985 288% => OK
Determiners: 0.0623501199041 0.0997080785238 63% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0383693045564 0.0249443105267 154% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0167865707434 0.0148568991511 113% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2232.0 2732.02544248 82% => OK
No of words: 384.0 452.878318584 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.8125 6.0361032391 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4267276788 4.58838876751 96% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.325520833333 0.366273622748 89% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.268229166667 0.280924506359 95% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.161458333333 0.200843997647 80% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.122395833333 0.132149295362 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79438125947 2.79330140395 100% => OK
Unique words: 175.0 219.290929204 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.455729166667 0.48968727796 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 47.9731259614 55.4138127331 87% => OK
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6194690265 87% => OK
Sentence length: 21.3333333333 23.380412469 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.3913869492 59.4972553346 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.0 141.124799967 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.3333333333 23.380412469 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.5 0.674092028746 74% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.94800884956 81% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.21349557522 77% => OK
Readability: 48.15625 51.4728631049 94% => OK
Elegance: 1.27272727273 1.64882698954 77% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.456170308311 0.391690518653 116% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.11790665641 0.123202303941 96% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0721603758841 0.077325440228 93% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.496345947591 0.547984918172 91% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.111065319294 0.149214159877 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.187844635454 0.161403998019 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.108176210305 0.0892212321368 121% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.432777887039 0.385218514788 112% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0516114317782 0.0692045440612 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.350879873796 0.275328986314 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0666836945338 0.0653680567796 102% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 10.4325221239 134% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.30420353982 38% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88274336283 41% => OK
Positive topic words: 12.0 7.22455752212 166% => OK
Negative topic words: 2.0 3.66592920354 55% => OK
Neutral topic words: 2.0 2.70907079646 74% => OK
Total topic words: 16.0 13.5995575221 118% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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