There is a general saying that says "youths are the leaders of tomorrow". A dysfunctional youth may evcentually grow to be a dysfunctional adult. The prompt recommends that it is best that a society prepare its young people for leadershippositions in various capacities by instilling in the a sense of cooperation and not competition. I strongly agree withthis points for three reasons.
First, a sense of unity among the youths of a society will eventually safe the society in the future from various threats that can break the society apart. For instance, if from childhood, every child has been taught that to be a good leader wherever you are, you need to look for the good of your "brother", that is be your bvrother's keeper - it is only natuaral that when these children grow, they will sought to keep the unity that exist in their organisations be it the goverment or industries by seeking the good of every one. With this sense of cooperation, a strong tie tends to bind everyone together that will protect the their organisation from discords that may bring about disunity.
Second, instilling a sense of cooperation in the young people of a society rather than competition elicits selflessness and a general will to achieve the goal of the organisations they are in. For instance, it will be almost impossible for the head of a leading IT firm to grow consistently over the years if the full time staff, interns and even janitors ( of which a great percentage of all workers are young people) are not working comperatively to achieve the firm's goal. When a sense of cooperation is in everyone, especially towards acheiving a set goal, leadership and followership will be easily achievable and in this sense, success is inevitable.
Third, cooperation among the youth of a nation brings about development. For example, a sense of cooperation among the youths of a local community where accesibility to water is a great challenge may help the youths to come together to find a temporal if not a lasting solution to this challenge untill maybe the government intervenes. The youth may come together to dig wells in startegic places within the community for the general good. A sense of coperation in this regard has bring development in form of social works and may also improve water related businesses which are all indicators of development.
In conclusion, one may argue that competition is essential to survival, however, in a world where we all need one another to survive as the top might be a little lonely, it is essential that we instill a sense of cooperation in our young people in order to have a healthy society.
- The following is taken from a memo from the advertising director of the Super Screen Movie Production Company According to a recent report from our marketing department during the past year fewer people attended Super Screen produced movies than in any ot 51
- The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government industry or any other fields is by instilling in them sense of cooperation not competition 66
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, look, may, second, so, still, third, well, for example, for instance, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.5258426966 118% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.4196629213 129% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 14.8657303371 47% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.3162921348 159% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 33.0505617978 109% => OK
Preposition: 68.0 58.6224719101 116% => OK
Nominalization: 20.0 12.9106741573 155% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2213.0 2235.4752809 99% => OK
No of words: 449.0 442.535393258 101% => OK
Chars per words: 4.92873051225 5.05705443957 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.60321845022 4.55969084622 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.09291584028 2.79657885939 111% => OK
Unique words: 218.0 215.323595506 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.485523385301 0.4932671777 98% => OK
syllable_count: 699.3 704.065955056 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.99550561798 140% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.2370786517 74% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 23.0359550562 126% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 91.6048518851 60.3974514979 152% => OK
Chars per sentence: 147.533333333 118.986275619 124% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.9333333333 23.4991977007 127% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.26666666667 5.21951772744 139% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 14.0 7.80617977528 179% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.285998328822 0.243740707755 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0980560484572 0.0831039109588 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.101716161737 0.0758088955206 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.158661055003 0.150359130593 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0632302795562 0.0667264976115 95% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.8 14.1392134831 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.04 48.8420337079 86% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 12.1743820225 120% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.91 12.1639044944 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.2 8.38706741573 98% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 100.480337079 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 11.8971910112 76% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 11.2143820225 121% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.