the best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industries and other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition
Today's young people are tomorrow's leaders, scientists, industrialists and entrepreneurs. Future world depends on today's young people. Their well brought-up can make the world a better place to live in. In their growing up, two of the most important parts of one's life are competition and cooperation. The claim avers that to thrive in different field in future, the best way to prepare the youths is to deep-root in them the sense of cooperation; not competition. I moderately agree to this claim some specific reasons.
Firstly, sick-competition can harm a youth rather than prepare to come out better. When a student first enter's school, he/she needs an environment which is friendly towards him, not a competitive one. If he finds around himself an air of competition, he will surely scare in the very first step of his development. It will be intrinsically growing inside him that to do well, and to 'satisfy' their parents and teachers, they should join this ever-running competition. If he fails to graspe, if he stumbles while catching up with this competition, it will affect him negatively and make him more scared. Rather, a good cooperation will help him to be himself, and after all to overcome his fear.
Secondly, in various fields of our lives, cooperation is a must. Without proper cooperation and help it is difficult for a nation to thrive. The claim mentions about leadership in government and industry; in both cases cooperation is a must. A leader can change the society like miracle if he has the support from public as well as the opponent team. In industries, when two or more are helpful to each other, their revenue and profit will surely increase.
However, not always cooperation can bring success. In one-to-one sports and competitive games, competition is the only way to do better. Lets say Tennis, one of the most famous sports around the world, needs impetuous competition against the opponent to win. If one tries to cooperate his/her opponent in during the game,, he/she surely will loose. Again there are sports where both competition and cooperation are needed. Football is played all around the world, in football, a team has to cooperate with each of its member and has to compete with the opponent team. These are true in many aspects outside sports as well. Competition sometimes can have a direct positive impact on a person. When he finds his output better than others around, it engourages him to do even better in his own sector.
A combination of cooperation and healthy competition can make one the best-prepared for future. So both cooperation and competition is needed to prosper in future life and unhealthy competition must not be tought.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, however, if, second, secondly, so, well, while, after all, as to, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.5258426966 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.4196629213 129% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 14.8657303371 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.3162921348 62% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 43.0 33.0505617978 130% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 68.0 58.6224719101 116% => OK
Nominalization: 27.0 12.9106741573 209% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2258.0 2235.4752809 101% => OK
No of words: 450.0 442.535393258 102% => OK
Chars per words: 5.01777777778 5.05705443957 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.6057793516 4.55969084622 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88268050841 2.79657885939 103% => OK
Unique words: 238.0 215.323595506 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.528888888889 0.4932671777 107% => OK
syllable_count: 691.2 704.065955056 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 6.24550561798 176% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.99550561798 140% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.10617977528 225% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.38483146067 160% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 28.0 20.2370786517 138% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 23.0359550562 69% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 30.2214614917 60.3974514979 50% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 80.6428571429 118.986275619 68% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.0714285714 23.4991977007 68% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.28571428571 5.21951772744 63% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 19.0 10.2758426966 185% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.174453317501 0.243740707755 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.046257908039 0.0831039109588 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0566027371868 0.0758088955206 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.109153319544 0.150359130593 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0599599006773 0.0667264976115 90% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.2 14.1392134831 72% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 48.8420337079 130% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 12.1743820225 69% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.54 12.1639044944 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.8 8.38706741573 93% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 100.480337079 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 11.8971910112 59% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.4 11.2143820225 75% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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