Every person admires hero or any famous personality and consider them as role model. Role model can be any famous person such as actors, political leaders, or any business tycoons. However, I believe that character of these famous personality cannot help to determine the character of people admiring them and considering them as role models. I would like to explore this further in following lines.
First and foremost, there are many famous personality considered as role models by numerous people but it is not necessary that they also follow the path taken by them. Take the example of Mahatma Gandhi. He is considered as hero by people all over the world. This does not mean that Gandhi's path of non-violence is followed by all of them. There are people who follow his path, on the other hand, there are some people who are not following his path though they admire him as a hero. Thus, role models cannot be considered as a true reflection of the society.
Besides this, take the example of a famous politician who is honest and works religiously for the welfare of the society. This does not indicate that people who admire him are veracious. If this was the case, there would be less corruption in the society. Moreover, many people would have contributed towards the progress of the nation but this is not the case. Similarly, if a leader is venal that does not imply that the whole society is corrupt.
Last but not the least, there are many actors who are admired because of the roles they portray in the movies. But in real life they may be totally different from character played by them. Many actors are drug-addicted that does not insinuate that people admiring them are also drug-addicted. Additionally, there are many famous business tycoons who are looked up to by large number of people. For example, Steve Jobs, he is known to be stickler and is admired by many. This do not indicate that people admiring him are also very strict and adhere to their ideas religiously. If this is the case, there would have many successful businessman with innovative ideas. Thus, the statement is not correct, that role models' character help to know about the character of the society.
To sum up, as discussed above, the character of few people do not help to know the character of whole society. There are people who are totally different in character from the role model they admire. As every person is different and admiring someone does not mean emulating that person.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 409, Rule ID: DOES_X_HAS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'imply'? As 'do' is already inflected, the verb cannot also be inflected.
Suggestion: imply
...rly, if a leader is venal that does not implies that the whole society is corrupt. ...
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Line 7, column 234, Rule ID: DOES_X_HAS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'insinuate'? As 'do' is already inflected, the verb cannot also be inflected.
Suggestion: insinuate
... actors are drug-addicted that does not insinuates that people admiring them are also drug...
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Line 7, column 484, Rule ID: DONT_NEEDS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'indicate'?
Suggestion: indicate
...ler and is admired by many. This do not indicates that people admiring him are also very ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, however, if, look, may, moreover, similarly, so, thus, for example, such as, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 32.0 19.5258426966 164% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.4196629213 64% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 14.8657303371 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.3162921348 159% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 33.0505617978 130% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 46.0 58.6224719101 78% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 12.9106741573 31% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2065.0 2235.4752809 92% => OK
No of words: 429.0 442.535393258 97% => OK
Chars per words: 4.81351981352 5.05705443957 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55107846309 4.55969084622 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.50803718912 2.79657885939 90% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 215.323595506 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.424242424242 0.4932671777 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 676.8 704.065955056 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.2370786517 128% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 23.0359550562 69% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 30.303299174 60.3974514979 50% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 79.4230769231 118.986275619 67% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.5 23.4991977007 70% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.07692307692 5.21951772744 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 19.0 10.2758426966 185% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.83258426966 124% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.117264870741 0.243740707755 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0379111101029 0.0831039109588 46% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0524472008868 0.0758088955206 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0777574571214 0.150359130593 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0398754498406 0.0667264976115 60% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.5 14.1392134831 67% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 48.8420337079 113% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.1743820225 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.32 12.1639044944 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.49 8.38706741573 89% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 100.480337079 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.8971910112 71% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 11.2143820225 75% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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