Claim: In any field — business, politics, education, government — those in power should step
down after five years.
Reason: The surest path to success for any enterprise is revitalization through new
leadership.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with
the claim and the reason on which that claim is based.
The above claim and reason is stating that whatever the field, the people in power must step down after a tenure of 5 years. According to reason this will ensure the success of the enterprise. This may sound true and convincing as even our goverment elections are held every 5 year, but I do not agree with the claim or the reason provided. There are some facts which must be considered before calling this option as the 'surest path'. Applying the same formula of success to every field doesn't bring the same results.
In business, politics, education and government, experience of the leader counts the most. A person with experience will ensure the success and smooth running of the enterprise. With change in leadership every 5 year, it will not allow the person to understand the working of the system properly and to take effective measures. Moreover, with new member coming every few interval will also make it difficult for the companies or nations to trust the new leadership in power. As relations are created and maintained over a period of time, 5 years seems very short span if we consider the life of a industry or a nation. A leader must be able to understand the system of the enterprise, get to know the difficulties of the situation and apply the required remedies. Furthermore, we must take into account that this solutions will take time to show effects and would require some changes over a period of time. With new leadership every 5 years, this will become difficult to take place.
In addition, revitalization only works to ensure that there is no misuse of power. Since, the leader is being change every time, it makes sure that the power does not retain to only one person. But, this can also be done by distributing the power into multiple entities. For example, in an Industry, rather than appointing one manager for all the operations, we can distribute the task into multiple positions. This will ensure that the overall control of system is not limited to one person. This will avoid courruption and misuse of power. Hence, only revitalization may not be the only surest path to success.
In conclusion, For the success of an enterprise we do not need to revitalize the leadership. A leader who gains experience over time will be more beneficial for the success of the enterprise than assigning a new one every 5 years.
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- Claim In any field business politics education government those in power should step down after five years Reason The surest path to success for any enterprise is revitalization through new leadership Write a response in which you discuss the extent to wh 50
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
... same formula of success to every field doesnt bring the same results. In business, p...
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Line 2, column 367, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun interval seems to be countable; consider using: 'few intervals'.
Suggestion: few intervals
... Moreover, with new member coming every few interval will also make it difficult for the com...
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Line 2, column 522, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...tions are created and maintained over a period of time, 5 years seems very short span if we co...
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Line 2, column 595, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...y short span if we consider the life of a industry or a nation. A leader must be ...
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Line 2, column 808, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...hermore, we must take into account that this solutions will take time to show effect...
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Line 2, column 892, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...s and would require some changes over a period of time. With new leadership every 5 years, thi...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, hence, if, may, moreover, so, for example, in addition, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 19.5258426966 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 12.4196629213 153% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 14.8657303371 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.3162921348 62% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 22.0 33.0505617978 67% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 58.6224719101 90% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 12.9106741573 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1946.0 2235.4752809 87% => OK
No of words: 408.0 442.535393258 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.76960784314 5.05705443957 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49433085973 4.55969084622 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63670360154 2.79657885939 94% => OK
Unique words: 195.0 215.323595506 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.477941176471 0.4932671777 97% => OK
syllable_count: 625.5 704.065955056 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 6.24550561798 144% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.99550561798 120% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.38483146067 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.2370786517 109% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 23.0359550562 78% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 31.9837252003 60.3974514979 53% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 88.4545454545 118.986275619 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.5454545455 23.4991977007 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.22727272727 5.21951772744 81% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 7.80617977528 77% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 10.2758426966 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.178374152686 0.243740707755 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0594726461984 0.0831039109588 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0489111054616 0.0758088955206 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.126864946505 0.150359130593 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0467017984353 0.0667264976115 70% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.3 14.1392134831 73% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 48.8420337079 126% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 12.1743820225 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.39 12.1639044944 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.59 8.38706741573 90% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 100.480337079 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 11.8971910112 63% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.2143820225 82% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.7820224719 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.