Claim: Even though young people often receive the advice to “follow your dreams,” more emphasis should be placed on picking worthy goals. Reason: Many people’s dreams are inherently selfish.Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which

Adolescence is not an easy part of human life. We have to be mindful about our future with the little experience we gained through the childhood. Though it is plausible, not every child gets the clarity and the proper environment to shape their goals in a right beneficial way. Therefore it becomes the society's responsibility in a form a parent, a teacher or a leader, and I completely agree with the claim that we should encourage and emphasis young people to pick worthy goals as their dreams and to follow them.

To begin with, young people mostly struggle to understand themselves and their capabilities. In addition to that, they show great apathy towards future plans till they finish the high school. Most of them only start to think about what they should do next when the school starts to ask about their higher studies plans. In such a careless age, we can't expect them to have a clear view about their goals and worthiness of the goal and all. So it is adults responsibility to guide them towards the adolescence and emphasis the importance of picking meaningful goals. Schools and teachers can easily teach them about choosing a goal and following the goal.

Additionally, young people wouldn't have explored much to the society and only rounded with friends and having fun. It would be too much to expect them to be cognizant about the future by their own. Instead, we can light the spark in them by providing enough information how to set a right goal and then how to follow them. Instructing them what to do next won't be a healthy option in a long term, but guiding them and enlightening them with the experience of adulthood will definitely help them to get an overall idea.

Nonetheless, as adults we end up showering all the knowledge, gained through our experience, and expect them to follow our path. All humans are not similar and the uniqueness everyone have should not be suppressed through dictations. In spite of the acerbic way, we can talk with them and try to understand their dreams and help them to make them understand how to dream and guide them how to achieve the dreams.

Though I can't completely agree with the reason, it is partially true. The inherent selfishness in young people's dreams is also a possibility but not true in all cases. Many adolescents' ignorance and incognizance lead them to a unworthy goals sometimes, but we can shape them with the right guidance and approach.

To sum up, by encouragement and emphasising, we can guide young people to pick worthy goals as their dreams and to follow them.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 279, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
... their goals in a right beneficial way. Therefore it becomes the societys responsibility ...
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Line 3, column 348, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...udies plans. In such a careless age, we cant expect them to have a clear view about ...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: wouldn't
...the goal. Additionally, young people wouldnt have explored much to the society and o...
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Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
... how to achieve the dreams. Though I cant completely agree with the reason, it is...
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Line 9, column 174, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'adolescents'' or 'adolescent's'?
Suggestion: adolescents'; adolescent's
...ibility but not true in all cases. Many adolescents ignorance and incognizance lead them to...
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Line 9, column 226, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...ignorance and incognizance lead them to a unworthy goals sometimes, but we can sh...
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Line 9, column 237, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'goal'?
Suggestion: goal
...nd incognizance lead them to a unworthy goals sometimes, but we can shape them with t...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, nonetheless, so, then, therefore, in addition, in all cases, in spite of, to begin with, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 19.5258426966 56% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.4196629213 81% => OK
Conjunction : 27.0 14.8657303371 182% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 11.3162921348 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 53.0 33.0505617978 160% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 63.0 58.6224719101 107% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 12.9106741573 101% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2119.0 2235.4752809 95% => OK
No of words: 444.0 442.535393258 100% => OK
Chars per words: 4.77252252252 5.05705443957 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.5903493882 4.55969084622 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65680529162 2.79657885939 95% => OK
Unique words: 212.0 215.323595506 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.477477477477 0.4932671777 97% => OK
syllable_count: 629.1 704.065955056 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59117977528 88% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.2370786517 104% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.8044253318 60.3974514979 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.904761905 118.986275619 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.1428571429 23.4991977007 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.38095238095 5.21951772744 103% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.97078651685 121% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 7.80617977528 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 10.2758426966 136% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.129156876069 0.243740707755 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0527538630246 0.0831039109588 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0561156980786 0.0758088955206 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0961280505615 0.150359130593 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0410018347686 0.0667264976115 61% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 14.1392134831 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 67.08 48.8420337079 137% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 12.1743820225 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.39 12.1639044944 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.56 8.38706741573 90% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 100.480337079 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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