The argument has been constructed based on various unstated assumptions. The argument falls apart because of making a decision based on the percent increase in overall seafood consumption and relying on a study about two-incoming families mindset of having more outside foods.
To begin with, including the 30 percent increase of overall seafood consumption in Bay City restaurents in decision making is not much agreeable. The seafood consumption increase could have happened because of many reasons such that the less availability of other meats in the Bay City, ocean life could have been very low five years ago in the Bay City and goverment could have made successful attempts to revive them or the increased population could have made the people to expand their food habits to other foodtypes. Had the argument provided more details why the increase has happened, we can rely on the conclusion derived in the argument. And also, the argument had a cling on the fact that there is no current seafood specialty operating restaurants. The argument could have supported its decision by mentioning whether any restaurants, at that period, provided tasty seafoods even though they were not particularly seafood specialty restaurants.
Secondly, the author has pointed out about the study result on two-income families. To validate the study results, it is very important to analyse the region and the type of people included in the city. The food habits of a family highly depends on the adult’s job type and working hours. If the couple works in a 16-hours shift for a day, it is unlikely they will cook in home, at the same time, we can condratict this fact with the regular 8-hour shift works such as post offices, banks. Therefore, the argument becomes weaker by not providing these details about the study to validate its claim.
Finally, the argument has missed to highlight another fact about the economy level in the city. Since seafoods are basically high in cost, in most of the regions, and that makes difficult for families with less income. If the Bay City was filled with more than a half of low income families, then the argument’s conclusion will not yield expected results. Analysing the average income level in the region could support the assurance of profitable restaurant.
Had the argument provided more details about the Bay city’s average income level, more in-depth look on the study, the argument could have strengthened its claim. Without these implications, we can’t rely on the conclusion derived based on assumptions.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 18 15
No. of Words: 418 350
No. of Characters: 2089 1500
No. of Different Words: 202 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.522 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.998 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.56 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 150 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 122 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 81 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 43 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 23.222 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 12.099 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.444 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.351 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.558 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.145 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 27, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'missed highlighting'.
Suggestion: missed highlighting
...its claim. Finally, the argument has missed to highlight another fact about the economy level in...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, if, look, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, such as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 19.6327345309 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.9520958084 93% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 11.1786427146 63% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 13.6137724551 29% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 19.0 28.8173652695 66% => OK
Preposition: 59.0 55.5748502994 106% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 16.3942115768 104% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2164.0 2260.96107784 96% => OK
No of words: 418.0 441.139720559 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.17703349282 5.12650576532 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52162009685 4.56307096286 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71910554163 2.78398813304 98% => OK
Unique words: 209.0 204.123752495 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.5 0.468620217663 107% => OK
syllable_count: 675.9 705.55239521 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.76447105788 114% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.22255489022 166% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 19.7664670659 91% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 22.8473053892 101% => OK
Sentence length SD: 68.8663941768 57.8364921388 119% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.222222222 119.503703932 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.2222222222 23.324526521 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.77777777778 5.70786347227 84% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.20758483034 37% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 6.88822355289 160% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.237027790443 0.218282227539 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0758255481172 0.0743258471296 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0810354476054 0.0701772020484 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.123312974108 0.128457276422 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0869464981713 0.0628817314937 138% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 14.3799401198 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 48.3550499002 100% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.197005988 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.06 12.5979740519 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.74 8.32208582834 105% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 98.500998004 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 12.3882235529 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.1389221557 101% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.