Generally, a society expects that schools should be a platfor where students can learn most kind of extra curricular activities including art, music, sports and physical education according to their interests. Instead of pushing everything to each and every student, in most cases, schools provides options to students preference. When a school does not have enough funding and plans to eliminate one of such curricular activity courses, I would prefer art and music to be removed.
First, art and music is a very vast genre where a school must limit its courses to some particular areas. For example, music alone has different categories such as singing, instrumentation, lyrics writing. In those sub categories, there are plethora of options available to focus one's interest on. To be specific, in Indian culture, when it comes to singing there are classical, karnatic, rap and gana genres, when it comes to instruments learning there are piano, keyboard, tabela, tambura, veena and many more. If a school decides to provide music courses, it can't hire professionals in all kind of available options and teach the students. Instead, the school have to restrict its range of options and students are cornered to choose one among them irregard of their personal interests. So, eliminating music courses in a school, will benefit the school's funding well. On top of that, students also will have opportunity to explore their specific music interest from outside professional coaching.
Second, the high maintenance of equipments used in art and music courses on makes it less worthy to keep funding. For example, when a school conducts art and music courses, it have to purchase a enough number of music instruments based on its population. Having one instrument for a hundred students will not serve the course's purpose but will be maintained for name sake. Along with the buying cost, maintaining the instruments on working condition also requires money and human resources. So, for a thriving limited funded school, removing music courses will benefit with a huge impact.
In summary, though art and music courses are very important to trigger a student's curiosity and interest in extra curricular activities, cutting them will be helpful for a school that looks for cost effective courses.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 428, Rule ID: TO_NON_BASE[1]
Message: The verb after "to" should be in the base form: 'instrument'.
Suggestion: instrument
..., rap and gana genres, when it comes to instruments learning there are piano, keyboard, tab...
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Line 3, column 563, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...ol decides to provide music courses, it cant hire professionals in all kind of avail...
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Line 3, column 563, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'cants'?
Suggestion: cants
...ol decides to provide music courses, it cant hire professionals in all kind of avail...
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Line 5, column 177, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'has'?
Suggestion: has
...hool conducts art and music courses, it have to purchase a enough number of music in...
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Line 5, column 194, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
... and music courses, it have to purchase a enough number of music instruments base...
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Line 7, column 74, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'students'' or 'student's'?
Suggestion: students'; student's
...courses are very important to trigger a students curiosity and interest in extra curricu...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, look, second, so, well, for example, in summary, kind of, such as, in most cases, on top of that
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 43.0788530466 42% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 52.1666666667 84% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1933.0 1977.66487455 98% => OK
No of words: 369.0 407.700716846 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.23848238482 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38284983912 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73606193544 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 203.0 212.727598566 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.550135501355 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 599.4 618.680645161 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.59856630824 31% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.1006865634 48.9658058833 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.705882353 100.406767564 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.7058823529 20.6045352989 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.94117647059 5.45110844103 127% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.248681186066 0.236089414692 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0865196453547 0.076458572812 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0654453758629 0.0737576698707 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.164384151338 0.150856017488 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0373324484962 0.0645574589148 58% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 11.7677419355 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 58.1214874552 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.11 10.9000537634 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.17 8.01818996416 114% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 86.8835125448 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 86.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 26.0 Out of 30
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