Claim: Governments must ensure that their major cities receive the financial support they need in order to thrive.
Reason: It is primarily in cities that a nation's cultural traditions are preserved and generated.
A country’s cultural tradition is a vast aspect. The whole country represents it together with all its resources. Every city, small town, village contribute to the representation of its culture to the world. While major cities require government attention in terms of financial support, other cities and towns cannot be ignored. Because for other underprivileged cities to flourish, government support is extremely important.
Each country has a small number of cities that represent its cultures to the rest of the world. Usually people from all over the country gather in those cities in search of living, experiencing the fusion of the cultures of every corners of that nation. For example, New York City in the United States. You can find people from every corner of the country. Even people from most of the countries of the world come to this place. It has museums, libraries, cultural centers, broadways and so on. So it is necessary that government ensures the support it needs in order to represent the culture of the country to the rest of the world. The Natural History Museum of New York, which contains numerous millions of years old objects which need a huge support from the government in order to be preserved. There is the central park, which is famous not only in the US, but also to the world. Which means the city needs additional attention in order to thrive.
On the other hand, the culture does not only consist of big cities like New York or Washington D.C., in the case of US, but also the smallest towns in the furthest corners of the country. Small towns and villages also have rich cultural traditions to offer, which require sufficient government attention. The government should identify their needs in order to flourish. In many cases due to lack of resources underprivileges towns and villages fail to preserve and represent what they have. Financial support from the government will help the inhabitants to live their life with their traditions and have their own identity in the nation and the world. Their children will grow up being familiar with the culture that made them thereselves, they will be proud of their identity.
Therefore it can be said that major cities require financial support from the government to keep the cultural traiditions upright, while other small and seemingly insignificant towns and villages should also receive some support for them to go forward.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...rivileged cities to flourish, government support is extremely important. Eac...
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Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, use 'a few', or use 'some'
Suggestion: a few; some
...remely important. Each country has a small number of cities that represent its cultures to t...
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Message: “Which” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... only in the US, but also to the world. Which means the city needs additional attenti...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
...y will be proud of their identity. Therefore it can be said that major cities requir...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, so, therefore, while, for example, in many cases, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 19.5258426966 51% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.4196629213 72% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 14.8657303371 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.3162921348 88% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 33.0505617978 85% => OK
Preposition: 65.0 58.6224719101 111% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 12.9106741573 101% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2035.0 2235.4752809 91% => OK
No of words: 403.0 442.535393258 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.04962779156 5.05705443957 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48049772903 4.55969084622 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67002361427 2.79657885939 95% => OK
Unique words: 187.0 215.323595506 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.464019851117 0.4932671777 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 608.4 704.065955056 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.2370786517 109% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 23.0359550562 78% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 50.6430548868 60.3974514979 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.5 118.986275619 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.3181818182 23.4991977007 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.72727272727 5.21951772744 71% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.83258426966 207% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.346223612923 0.243740707755 142% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.103603146824 0.0831039109588 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0766437876615 0.0758088955206 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.220396247752 0.150359130593 147% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.021700288369 0.0667264976115 33% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 14.1392134831 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 48.8420337079 126% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 12.1743820225 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.01 12.1639044944 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.74 8.38706741573 92% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 100.480337079 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 11.8971910112 55% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.2143820225 82% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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