Claim: Governments must ensure that their major cities receive the financial support they need in order to thrive.
Reason: It is primarily in cities that a nation's cultural traditions are preserved and generated.
The argument support the gurantee of financial support to marjor cities, based on the reason that a nation's cultural traditions are primirily preserved in cities. From my point of view, cities play a center role in the development of a nation and should get enough financial support to thrive, but it is simply not true that it is cities that preserve the most of a nation's precious cultural traditions.
First, the major cities do have critical impact on the economic, social and also cultural development of surrounding areas and even the whole nation. To support this argument, we need to revisit the orgin and function of a city. A city is where production factors, including people, capital, technology agregate. Because of the concentration of all the factors, cities have more factories, shopping malls, residence blocks, train stations and all kinds of modern facilities that make the creative activites of human being easier. Therefore, cities, expecially the mega-cities, such as Tokyo in Japan and New York in the USA, can greatly support the growth of the whole nation and should no doubt be guranteed the necessary financail support in order to suivive.
Though I admit that majors cities should receive the financial support from the nation, I can not agree with the reason that cultural tradition's are basically preserved in nation. The achievement of cultures from the rural area should not be neglected. All kinds of art and literature can be mentioned here to examplify the important role countries play in a nation's cultural development: folk musics, folk stories, paintings and sculptures created by anonymous country artists, and so on.
Last but not least, it would be unfair to devote even more financial support to major cities when major cities generally possess more resource than countries and are already developing faster than countries. There are still many countries in the third world where living conditions are endangered and are in the urgent need for the country's financial support to build basic infrastructure including road, electricity supply and clean drinking water system. It would be too crual to turn down the urgent need of the country people with the excuse of culture preservation and generation in wealthy major cities.
In conclusion, both cities and countries are important in the development of a nation's culture, as well as economics and society. Therefore, we should try to strike a balance of resource allocation between them rather than hastily regard any of them to be negligible.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 99, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a nation' or simply 'nations'?
Suggestion: a nation; nations
...marjor cities, based on the reason that a nations cultural traditions are primirily prese...
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Line 1, column 365, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a nation' or simply 'nations'?
Suggestion: a nation; nations
... it is cities that preserve the most of a nations precious cultural traditions. First, ...
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Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a nation' or simply 'nations'?
Suggestion: a nation; nations
...fy the important role countries play in a nations cultural development: folk musics, folk...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, so, still, therefore, third, well, as to, in conclusion, no doubt, such as, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.5258426966 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.4196629213 105% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 14.8657303371 121% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.3162921348 80% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 18.0 33.0505617978 54% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 58.6224719101 90% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 12.9106741573 116% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2135.0 2235.4752809 96% => OK
No of words: 411.0 442.535393258 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.19464720195 5.05705443957 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.50256981431 4.55969084622 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75378500493 2.79657885939 98% => OK
Unique words: 215.0 215.323595506 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.523114355231 0.4932671777 106% => OK
syllable_count: 662.4 704.065955056 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.2370786517 74% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 23.0359550562 117% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.7644639406 60.3974514979 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 142.333333333 118.986275619 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.4 23.4991977007 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.2 5.21951772744 138% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.328524901439 0.243740707755 135% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.118245267969 0.0831039109588 142% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0970896253647 0.0758088955206 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.190874965091 0.150359130593 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0883871419717 0.0667264976115 132% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.7 14.1392134831 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 48.8420337079 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 12.1743820225 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.12 12.1639044944 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.28 8.38706741573 111% => OK
difficult_words: 112.0 100.480337079 111% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.8971910112 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 11.2143820225 114% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.7820224719 119% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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