Claim: Governments must ensure that their major cities receive the financial support they need in order to thrive.
Reason: It is primarily in cities that a nation's cultural traditions are preserved and generated.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim and the reason on which that claim is based.
Preserving cultural tradition costs a lot and residents tend to use the money to build up convenience infrastructures, therefore, there are various opinions regarding this topic. Some visionaries, including the speaker, claim that governments should provide financial support to major cities in order to thrive their traditions whereas others argue that governments don’t have to use the money for cities’ traditions because some cities are not interested in improving a nation’s cultural traditions. Admittedly, both opinions are equally important. As far as I see it, I agree with the speaker’s statement that countries should provide enough fund to major cities to support their cultures because cities can have an opportunity to think about their identity of the city. However, it is erroneous to conclude that cities should receive money from the government to improve their traditions without considering disadvantages of the statement, and I, therefore, discuss and provide evidence supporting the speaker’s statement is more crucial in the following analysis.
To begin with, one logical explanation for my fundamental agreement is that people, nowadays, need the opportunity to think about unique traditions for their country because many countries tend to become identical. For example, people cannot distinguish a big part of the difference with a small city in the Japan and Korea, because they are both trying to generate new technology and forget old fascinated cultures which youngster believes not cool stuff. However, if there is a fund from governments, and if we have to use the money for preserving our culture, citizens have to think about what their city’s traditions were. Thus, I believe that we should not waste our cultural differences, so to make original characteristics of the country, I believe the government’s support in preserving traditions are useful.
Furthermore, if the country remember their traditional cultures and it attracts others, I believe the number of visitors in the country must increase, thus, the nation can earn more money. Suppose, for example, that my prefecture in Japan preserves a lot of cultural sites, such as cleaning forgotten temple and shrine, and make a museum. If this culture attracts other country’s people, they might come to my prefecture and use the money for an entrance fee and staying fee, so my city can receive money from new visitors, and then, this money will finally back to the nation’s fund. Therefore, I believe that government’s money will increase the nation’s profit, so I think the speaker’s claim is profitable.
Even with all reasons, however, it would be too perfunctory to sum up that the government’s fund for a city is useful since there is no denying that the disadvantages of the claim. Admittedly, using the money for preserving culture costs a lot, and governments are not sure whether we can succeed in cultural preserving, so some might contend that the idea is a waste of money. However, this argument overlooks the fact that if people stop to use the money to preserve culture, our next generations will forget culture, hence, they might speak the same language, wear identical clothes, and eat same foods. Many people today want to have a different culture and enjoy going to other places to learn traditions, therefore, I emphasize that a government’s fund is useful.
Consequently, I advocated that a government’s support for cities to preserve culture is valuable. While using fund a lot is waste of money if the preserving does not succeed in, I agree that the claimer’s opinion because we can earn extra money and remember the importance of culture, and I, therefore, insist that the country should provide money to preserve and generate city’s culture.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, finally, furthermore, hence, however, if, look, regarding, so, then, therefore, thus, whereas, while, for example, i think, such as, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.5258426966 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 20.0 12.4196629213 161% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 14.8657303371 121% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.3162921348 150% => OK
Pronoun: 57.0 33.0505617978 172% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 62.0 58.6224719101 106% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 12.9106741573 139% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3255.0 2235.4752809 146% => OK
No of words: 604.0 442.535393258 136% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.38907284768 5.05705443957 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.95746018188 4.55969084622 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.18809823096 2.79657885939 114% => OK
Unique words: 260.0 215.323595506 121% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.430463576159 0.4932671777 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 1023.3 704.065955056 145% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 6.24550561798 256% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.10617977528 193% => OK
Conjunction: 7.0 1.77640449438 394% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 4.38483146067 23% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.2370786517 94% => OK
Sentence length: 31.0 23.0359550562 135% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 67.3773842722 60.3974514979 112% => OK
Chars per sentence: 171.315789474 118.986275619 144% => OK
Words per sentence: 31.7894736842 23.4991977007 135% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.0 5.21951772744 172% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 7.80617977528 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 5.13820224719 117% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.260906438575 0.243740707755 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0991713180241 0.0831039109588 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0699355765514 0.0758088955206 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.167194578262 0.150359130593 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0689997113121 0.0667264976115 103% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.9 14.1392134831 141% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 31.55 48.8420337079 65% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.6 12.1743820225 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.57 12.1639044944 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.52 8.38706741573 102% => OK
difficult_words: 128.0 100.480337079 127% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 11.8971910112 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.4 11.2143820225 128% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.7820224719 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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