The statement states that college students should base their choice of study on the availability of jobs in that field. This statement is not totally correct because this would lead the students to put away all their talents and personal interests and play safe in order to have a better pay and a stable life. I would like to point out that I totally disagree with the statement and provide with few reasoning which I feel would be plausible to explain my position.
Choosing an area of interest based on availability of jobs in that field is not a very good way to start your career. The high school education introduces us to the different fields in a brief manner. The high schools should have the responsibility of assessing the students to know their strengths and weaknesses and guide them towards taking the right step for their higher education. Students should also try to explore different areas and consolidate their interests to pursue in the future rather than studying just for jobs.
Apart from choosing the field and graduating, when students get placed, they have to love the work they do. Without loving the work I don't think there will be an interest in doing the work. All this will lead to 4 or 5 years of wasting time and money. If students have passion and love for the work they are doing, they experience different challenging situations that can help boost their confidence and gives them the opportunity to explore the different sides of the problem and hence the area.
Finally, choosing a job based on self-interest is good. There is a possibility of finding something ground-breaking in the field. Passionate enough, students can try to bring in different fields together to solve real world problems. This will impact the society in a good way and set an example for the future generations to come. If students have a good idea, money and resources, they can create a start-up, work hard and succeed in the development of the product and create jobs for those who are passionate about creating some products that impact the world in a better way.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 183, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a brief manner" with adverb for "brief"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...n introduces us to the different fields in a brief manner. The high schools should have the respo...
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Line 5, column 135, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...work they do. Without loving the work I dont think there will be an interest in doin...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, hence, if, so, apart from, i feel
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 19.5258426966 41% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.4196629213 97% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 14.8657303371 114% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.3162921348 80% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 31.0 33.0505617978 94% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 58.6224719101 80% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 12.9106741573 70% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1732.0 2235.4752809 77% => OK
No of words: 360.0 442.535393258 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.81111111111 5.05705443957 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35587717469 4.55969084622 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6227635976 2.79657885939 94% => OK
Unique words: 186.0 215.323595506 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.516666666667 0.4932671777 105% => OK
syllable_count: 517.5 704.065955056 74% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59117977528 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.2370786517 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.7819062297 60.3974514979 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.25 118.986275619 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.5 23.4991977007 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.0 5.21951772744 57% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.353689662795 0.243740707755 145% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.131506506147 0.0831039109588 158% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.188707858989 0.0758088955206 249% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.215089548939 0.150359130593 143% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.102192955467 0.0667264976115 153% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 14.1392134831 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 66.07 48.8420337079 135% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.1743820225 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.91 12.1639044944 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.84 8.38706741573 93% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 100.480337079 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 11.8971910112 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 75.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.5 Out of 6
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