College students should be encouraged to pursue subjects that interest them rather than the courses that seem most likely to lead to jobs.
In the era of fast social change on work and ideology, the most popular job also changes quickly and many people suffer affliction because they not only dislike their work but also obtain pressure from their family. Therefore, I believe that college students should be encouraged to choose courses interesting to them, for the following reasons.
The jobs having huge demand today do not represent it will sustain in the future. For example, thirty years ago in Taiwan, because of the high salary, low risk of unemployment, and the expansion of universities and population, a huge demand for teachers appealed lots of students. However, because of the unreasonable and extremely high house price, people cannot afford it, not to mention the cost of raising children so as to make the total fertility rate become the lowest country in the world in recent year. The less amount of students, the less demand for the teacher. Therefore, many graduates with an education degree cannot find teaching positions now, and even some small schools closing let teachers in there face the problem of unemployment. On the contrary, the artist could not get high pay before, due to the fact that employers overlooked the importance of design and the problem of patents. Nevertheless, one of the ways for companies to attract people's attention is beautiful designs, so the demand and salaries for designers have increased nowadays.
In addition, one way for people to be satisfied with their life is to do the job they are really interested in. During waking hours, people spend lots of time working including commute. When they back home, they still cannot relax because they have to do housework and interact with their children, and even have a bitter quarrel about financial problems. For example, in most Japan family, many husbands have to work in the company 12 hours a day, and their wives stay at home to do the housework and take care of children. Hence, because of the segregation of the work, the interaction and conversation between them decrease more and more, and even the wife does not hope the husband to back home during their children preparing for the test so as to lead a serious problem of mental health. Nonetheless, if these husbands at least enjoy the work, the probability of suffering the problem of mental health may decrease.
People who disagree with the statement may claim that students should live independently after graduation, and that the courses leading to jobs can help them earn more money so as to afford the cost of taking care of their parents and the debt such as college tuition debt. Still, studying the field without strong interest would increase the probability of dropping out of the school, even causing the problem of suicide. For instance, electronic engineering is the field in which graduates can get higher payment than other graduates in Taiwan. However, almost one-fourth students cannot graduate from this field, and few of them commit suicide. These students do not have the passion for it, and the only reason why they entered this field is compelled by their parents, because of the high pay after graduation. Therefore, I do not encourage the behavior of asking students to study the subject they do not like.
While it may seem realistic for students to choose courses leading to the job, studying the subject interesting to them would be more realistic from a long-term perspective. Therefore, I believe that college should encourage students to choose courses appealing to them. If they do not know what they like, they should try to find it.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, however, if, look, may, nevertheless, nonetheless, really, so, still, therefore, while, as to, at least, even so, for example, for instance, in addition, such as, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 19.5258426966 41% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 12.4196629213 137% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 14.8657303371 135% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.3162921348 71% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 41.0 33.0505617978 124% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 83.0 58.6224719101 142% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 12.9106741573 139% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3005.0 2235.4752809 134% => OK
No of words: 602.0 442.535393258 136% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.99169435216 5.05705443957 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.95335121839 4.55969084622 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5803117528 2.79657885939 92% => OK
Unique words: 301.0 215.323595506 140% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.5 0.4932671777 101% => OK
syllable_count: 912.6 704.065955056 130% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 8.0 4.99550561798 160% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.10617977528 258% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 8.0 1.77640449438 450% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 9.0 4.38483146067 205% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.2370786517 119% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 23.0359550562 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.3837728359 60.3974514979 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.208333333 118.986275619 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.0833333333 23.4991977007 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.16666666667 5.21951772744 156% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 10.2758426966 78% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 14.0 5.13820224719 272% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.202096476896 0.243740707755 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0661863126616 0.0831039109588 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0999363167566 0.0758088955206 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.152431605876 0.150359130593 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.122258886515 0.0667264976115 183% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 14.1392134831 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 48.8420337079 112% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.1743820225 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.96 12.1639044944 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.21 8.38706741573 98% => OK
difficult_words: 127.0 100.480337079 126% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 11.8971910112 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.2143820225 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 75.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.5 Out of 6
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