Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
People benefit more from traveling in their own country than from traveling to foreign countries.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Whether people would benefit more from their own country is weight on many aspect. However, the statement is based on generalization. Thus, learning more from their own country may not suitable for everyone.
It is so argued that people can learn lots of things in their state, because the language and culture in their home country is familiar to him, and they may not able to speak foreign language. So they could probably not realize anything, when they go to a foreign museum. Supporters of this argument must be reminded that nowadays there are lots of electronic devise which can translate the word or talk you do not know. In addition, there are plenty of information online telling the culture and habit of other places, people can just choose the country they familiar or closed to their own habit. By contrast, if you travel to other place, you may see the scenery or landscape that your own country does not have. For example, there isn't any desert in Taiwan, if Taiwanese wants to looks those beautiful scenery in desert, the only way is to go abroad.
Supporters of people should stay and travel in home country may still argued that people should spend lots of money if they want to go outside. The real picture, however, is that people can take train or ship instead of taking airplane, if they have tight budget. The ticket of train or ship is mush less than airplane. Furthermore, if you travel to country where the average merchandise price is much lower than your home country. The money you spent on hotel, restaurant or ticket will be less than you travel at home. By comparison, the culture and experience you feel at foreign place is not able to be mimic in your home country. For instance, European may never realize the beautiful beach and slow path life in South East Asia, if they deny to go there. Citizens who live near equator may never see snow or build a snowman, if they insist in staying in home place.
So beneficial is traveling abroad that it must be taken into more serious consideration. The problem you would encounter at foreign place in the past can be fixed by technology. Besides, there are lots of distinct experience you can feel, when you travel outside your home country.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Whether” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
Whether people would benefit more from their ow...
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Line 1, column 71, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun aspect seems to be countable; consider using: 'many aspects'.
Suggestion: many aspects
...ore from their own country is weight on many aspect. However, the statement is based on gen...
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Line 3, column 503, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ion online telling the culture and habit of other places, people can just choose ...
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Line 3, column 680, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ce, you may see the scenery or landscape that your own country does not have. For...
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Line 3, column 738, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: isn't
...untry does not have. For example, there isnt any desert in Taiwan, if Taiwanese want...
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Line 3, column 787, Rule ID: TO_NON_BASE[1]
Message: The verb after "to" should be in the base form: 'look'.
Suggestion: look
...desert in Taiwan, if Taiwanese wants to looks those beautiful scenery in desert, the ...
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Line 5, column 744, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'deny going', 'deny gonna'.
Suggestion: deny going; deny gonna
...w path life in South East Asia, if they deny to go there. Citizens who live near equator m...
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Line 7, column 283, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...n you travel outside your home country.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, furthermore, however, if, look, may, so, still, thus, for example, for instance, in addition
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.5258426966 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 20.0 12.4196629213 161% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 14.8657303371 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.3162921348 97% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 33.0505617978 115% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 58.6224719101 82% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 12.9106741573 70% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1840.0 2235.4752809 82% => OK
No of words: 391.0 442.535393258 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.70588235294 5.05705443957 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44676510885 4.55969084622 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.38303890414 2.79657885939 85% => OK
Unique words: 195.0 215.323595506 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.498721227621 0.4932671777 101% => OK
syllable_count: 567.9 704.065955056 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 6.24550561798 32% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.99550561798 140% => OK
Subordination: 9.0 3.10617977528 290% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.2370786517 99% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.2856376546 60.3974514979 60% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.0 118.986275619 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.55 23.4991977007 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.05 5.21951772744 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 7.80617977528 102% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 10.2758426966 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.83258426966 228% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.30932098842 0.243740707755 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0995139147863 0.0831039109588 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0830890520918 0.0758088955206 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.210927887955 0.150359130593 140% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0722381906294 0.0667264976115 108% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.5 14.1392134831 74% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 48.8420337079 124% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.1743820225 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.04 12.1639044944 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.69 8.38706741573 92% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 100.480337079 77% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 11.8971910112 63% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.