Educational institutions have a responsibility to dissuade students from pursuing fields of study in which they are unlikely to succeed.
Should students who are found wanting in a particular field be discouraged? While some may argue that as an educational institution it's their responsibility to assess a students strength and weak points and encourage in line with their strengths, however their has been a few exceptionally cases where students considered to be extremely weak at a particular field of study turn out to become specialist at such fields. Considering these situations, I disagree that students should be discouraged in fields of study they are found wanting.
Firstly, Neurosurgeon and the first doctor to do a successful operation on the separation of Siamese twins, Dr Benjamin Carson was once referred to as a dumb child who wouldn't make anything in life by his then school teacher. But his mother who wouldn't accept failure refused to give up on him and encouraged her son by providing various methods and books for him to study, her actions galvanised him and thus made him into the genius that he his today. It can be seen here that though he was discouraged by his teacher his assidousness proved otherwise
Like Ben Carson, Nobel Prize winner, Albert Einstein was also considered a failure. Failing his exam into a polytechnic at the age of 16, he was considered to not be successful in the science field. Today his works are been referenced, and his theories have brough about the growth in various technological advancement. Albert, once thought unlikely to succeed in the field of science, turnaround to become one of the founding fathers of science. If he had been discouraged then we may probably still be living in the stone age today.
In conclusion, while some who have been encouraged to take on new roles by their institution have in fact turned out successful and better for it, such methods should not be applied generally as the various examples stated above has shown cases where such discouragement turned out to be false.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 133, Rule ID: IT_IS[17]
Message: Did you mean 'it's' (='it is') instead of 'its' (possessive pronoun)?
Suggestion: it's; it is
...rgue that as an educational institution its their responsibility to assess a studen...
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Line 1, column 170, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'students'' or 'student's'?
Suggestion: students'; student's
...on its their responsibility to assess a students strength and weak points and encourage ...
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Line 5, column 169, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: wouldn't
...as once referred to as a dumb child who wouldnt make anything in life by his then schoo...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: wouldn't
...then school teacher. But his mother who wouldnt accept failure refused to give up on hi...
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Line 9, column 448, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...one of the founding fathers of science. If he had been discouraged then we may pro...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, may, so, still, then, thus, while, in conclusion, in fact
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.5258426966 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.4196629213 48% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 14.8657303371 61% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.3162921348 88% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 33.0505617978 100% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 58.6224719101 85% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 12.9106741573 70% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1617.0 2235.4752809 72% => OK
No of words: 325.0 442.535393258 73% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.97538461538 5.05705443957 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24591054749 4.55969084622 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86513256506 2.79657885939 102% => OK
Unique words: 185.0 215.323595506 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.569230769231 0.4932671777 115% => OK
syllable_count: 499.5 704.065955056 71% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 0.0 4.99550561798 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 20.2370786517 54% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 23.0359550562 126% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 84.0889926072 60.3974514979 139% => OK
Chars per sentence: 147.0 118.986275619 124% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.5454545455 23.4991977007 126% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.81818181818 5.21951772744 169% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 10.2758426966 68% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.83258426966 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.147414766647 0.243740707755 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0613322432603 0.0831039109588 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0616875456733 0.0758088955206 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0866743085988 0.150359130593 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0758598289887 0.0667264976115 114% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.8 14.1392134831 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.5 48.8420337079 103% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 12.1743820225 110% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.2 12.1639044944 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.57 8.38706741573 102% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 100.480337079 72% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 16.0 11.8971910112 134% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 11.2143820225 121% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.7820224719 119% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.