Educational institutions have a responsibility to dissuade students from pursuing fields of study in which they are unlikely to succeed.
In the current competitive and complex world, for a students it can be hard to choose correct path. Some students will choose fields based on their interest, while some other will choose based on their exam scores. However, indisputably this is a hard choice. Therefore some might need guidance of his/her educational institute. But dissuade students from perusing a field they are not likely to succeed is not the kind of help students want. In my opinion institutes should consider following three main factors before providing the guidance.
Students should pursue fields of study which aligns with their interest. If they are forced to choose, a career which they do not like, they will not be happy. Even if they pass exams and get a job in a high paying company, they will to perform at their highest level. They will haphazardly finish tasked assign to them. Consequently, they will faced to diatribes of upper management. Work place will become a hell to them. Furthermore they will not get promotions due to lack of performance. These professional life matters may affect to private and family life as well. If educational institutes can help student choose a field of study based on his/her interest then he/she could have avoided all the above problems. They will be able to perform better when they choose a career align with their interest. Even if the job market is bad, they can start their own firms, if they follow a career path which will make them happy. Therefore, it is an obligation of institutes to encourage students to persuade careers which aligns with their interests and institutes should help them to overcome their knowledge barriers.
If students are forced to follow fields with highest probability to succeed, then educational system resources, both physical and human, will not be enough. For example, to study field of medicine to be a doctor is a career which can lead to better life. But will a university has enough resources to train and educated students if number of students double. On the other hand this (increased teachers per student ration) will reduce the quality of the education. This will affect to degradation of that field and I future due to saturation of the job market, it will become a “bad” career choice.
Students’ ability to succeed should not decide based on his/ her current abilities. If a student can work hard and gain knowledge and can become a master. The most essential requirements are passion and courage. For example, if a student is interested in becoming a engineer, but currently he weaker at mathematics, one institute may dissuade him to follow another course. But, if the student has the will and determination he will improve his skills required to be an engineer. Skills can be learn and eventual will learn while they are following the course. But passion for a subject, determination those are hard to train. Therefore, it is not wise to discourage students from following a field of study based on their current performance. Because, they might have choose that career path with a passion and then they will eventually improve their skills and will succeed in future.
In conclusion, educational institute should do force students to give up on a field of study, which they are unlikely to be succeed. This is because, one’s current abilities can be enhanced so that he will become succeed in future. Furthermore the field he choose should be align with his interest, which will help him to have not only a better professional life but also a jubilant family life. Therefore, even if student will not likely to be successful educational institutes should support them to identify barriers and overcome them and follow the path with passion.
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- Statement of Purpose 3
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 51, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a student' or simply 'students'?
Suggestion: a student; students
...rent competitive and complex world, for a students it can be hard to choose correct path. ...
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Line 1, column 87, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to correct'
Suggestion: to correct
...for a students it can be hard to choose correct path. Some students will choose fields ...
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Line 1, column 261, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
...er, indisputably this is a hard choice. Therefore some might need guidance of his/her edu...
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Line 2, column 346, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'face'
Suggestion: face
...assign to them. Consequently, they will faced to diatribes of upper management. Work ...
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Line 2, column 425, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Furthermore,
... Work place will become a hell to them. Furthermore they will not get promotions due to lac...
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Line 2, column 573, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ect to private and family life as well. If educational institutes can help student...
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Line 3, column 41, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[2]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'with the highest'.
Suggestion: with the highest
...If students are forced to follow fields with highest probability to succeed, then educationa...
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Line 4, column 264, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
... if a student is interested in becoming a engineer, but currently he weaker at ma...
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Line 4, column 768, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'chosen'.
Suggestion: chosen
...t performance. Because, they might have choose that career path with a passion and the...
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Line 4, column 850, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... then they will eventually improve their skills and will succeed in future. In c...
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Line 4, column 877, Rule ID: IN_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
...improve their skills and will succeed in future. In conclusion, educational institute ...
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Line 5, column 221, Rule ID: IN_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
...enhanced so that he will become succeed in future. Furthermore the field he choose should...
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Line 5, column 232, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Furthermore,
... that he will become succeed in future. Furthermore the field he choose should be align wit...
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Line 5, column 257, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'chooses'.
Suggestion: chooses
...eed in future. Furthermore the field he choose should be align with his interest, whic...
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Line 5, column 274, Rule ID: SHOULD_BE_DO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'aligned'?
Suggestion: aligned
...rthermore the field he choose should be align with his interest, which will help him ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, furthermore, however, if, may, so, then, therefore, well, while, for example, in conclusion, in fact, kind of, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 19.5258426966 133% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 44.0 12.4196629213 354% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 21.0 14.8657303371 141% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.3162921348 97% => OK
Pronoun: 64.0 33.0505617978 194% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 74.0 58.6224719101 126% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 12.9106741573 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3109.0 2235.4752809 139% => OK
No of words: 627.0 442.535393258 142% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.95853269537 5.05705443957 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.00399520894 4.55969084622 110% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66165788005 2.79657885939 95% => OK
Unique words: 251.0 215.323595506 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.400318979266 0.4932671777 81% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 968.4 704.065955056 138% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 6.24550561798 208% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 11.0 3.10617977528 354% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 36.0 20.2370786517 178% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 23.0359550562 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.6086902224 60.3974514979 62% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.3611111111 118.986275619 73% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.4166666667 23.4991977007 74% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.66666666667 5.21951772744 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 15.0 7.80617977528 192% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 23.0 10.2758426966 224% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 5.13820224719 136% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.83258426966 124% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.326999651915 0.243740707755 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0941415557778 0.0831039109588 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0885571070358 0.0758088955206 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.212630771466 0.150359130593 141% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0261505443204 0.0667264976115 39% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.6 14.1392134831 75% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 48.8420337079 128% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 12.1743820225 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.19 12.1639044944 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.55 8.38706741573 90% => OK
difficult_words: 122.0 100.480337079 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 11.8971910112 55% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.2143820225 78% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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