Education is the gift parents can give to their children. Without a shadow of doubt high school and university are the most pivotal parts which decides our future careers. I firmly believe that having a off period between these two stages is beneficial to successful completion of university degree. In what follows I will elaborate and explain on what rationale my perspective is based on.
First of all, during the high school period we put our complete effort to get highest scores at exams and to contribute to extra curricular activities to build our profile so that we can apply for a good university. In my experience this is one of the most stressful period of life. During this time, I rarely attend to family functions and I had a distance relationship with my relatives. However, I utilize the time period between end of high school and university to rebuild and strengthen my relationship between relatives and neighbors. We organized several trips to visit natural wonders that relaxed my mind. And my relative gave me important advices to achieve my goals at the university.
Secondly, I believe obtaining work experience before university is vital in several aspects. One thing is the money you earn can used to buy a laptop or books required by the university. Additionally, this give you a financial independence which can be a huge relief to your parents. The work experience you gain during this period can aid you to see thing in practical perspective and this is really helpful to understand some lessons at university. Moreover, this work experience become handy especially when you apply for industrial internships during your undergraduate studies.
However, some people have different view on this. Taking a leave might cause to loss the momentum and the motivation your had for learning. In contrast, if a student can wisely use this time period he will not loss the motivation. For instance, after high school I worked as an library assistant at our public library and I used the free time I had to read on history books to prepare my self for the university education. Furthermore, some of the visitors were university students and their advices helped me to choose most suitable subjects at the university.
I firmly believe that, benefits of taking an off period between high schools overweighs it disadvantageous. This give time to relax the mind after stressful and busy high school. Also you can use this time to revive your weakened relationships. The work experience you gain during this period can become useful in long-term.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 202, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
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Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'get the highest'.
Suggestion: get the highest
...ol period we put our complete effort to get highest scores at exams and to contribute to ex...
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Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...instance, after high school I worked as an library assistant at our public library...
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Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
... the university education. Furthermore, some of the visitors were university students and t...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...d after stressful and busy high school. Also you can use this time to revive your we...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... period can become useful in long-term.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, however, if, moreover, really, second, secondly, so, then, for instance, in contrast, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 58.0 43.0788530466 135% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 60.0 52.1666666667 115% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2146.0 1977.66487455 109% => OK
No of words: 428.0 407.700716846 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.01401869159 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.548423998 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85873246336 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 218.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.509345794393 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 696.6 618.680645161 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 41.2582483336 48.9658058833 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.4166666667 100.406767564 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.8333333333 20.6045352989 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.375 5.45110844103 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.192483689715 0.236089414692 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0549078116906 0.076458572812 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0538085414315 0.0737576698707 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.116276556716 0.150856017488 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0337279754522 0.0645574589148 52% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 11.7677419355 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 58.1214874552 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.48 10.9000537634 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.1 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 86.8835125448 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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