formal education tends to restrain our minds and spirits rather than set them free."
This topic raises a controversial issue whether formal education tends to restrain out minds
and spirits rather than set them free or provide a better way to think, encourage people and
provide wide area to learn. Indisputably, formal education tends to restrain out minds and
spirits. Nevertheless, formal education provide a way to think something new and formal
education provide a clues that help to innovate something new in future.
First of all, I would like to consider the example of primary school. Where children are learn
something new, but it is a part of the formal education. If some children are very good singer,
other children are good in drawing, but formal education system always teach conventional
course. That become a hamper of children ability. At beginning time always children are very
optimistic to do a something in future. But formal education does not allowed to flourish
student own ability.
Seocnd, In the collage students are often to think something new but conventional educational
system does not allowed to do a best in future. For example, In computer science stream
students are talented in programming languages, but conventional course are advanced maths,
physics, Environment science etc so, students feel hamper with it own skill. Also some students
are good in Machine learning system and Artificial Inteligence but colleges are taught always
basic programming languages. That is not very important for AI students due to this students
growth in particular subject are become mediocre. Because colleges not updated as the wordlclass
education system.
Admittedly, formal education system provide a way to think and left with the some clues of
future science. Also formal education system provide a basic knowledge that is require to
become a solid depth knowledge. For example in schools teachers are teaches basic mathematical
formula for solve the problems. Without this formula student have a not able to solve like
advanced math problem so, it is essential have to formal education and fundamental knowwledge.
Also in science some chapter left with clue and using this clue student think about it, also
some challanges in textbooks that encorage to student and build a confidence in particular
subject.
In conclusion, we can not judge the education tends to hamper our mind and provide a wide area
to learn something new. However, in some areas the author conclusion still hold. But there are
many scenarios where formal education system prove as a benificial.
If the author extends this argument and broadly define this assertion than the author's view
more plausible.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 19, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a clue' or simply 'clues'?
Suggestion: a clue; clues
...thing new and formal education provide a clues that help to innovate something new in ...
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Line 5, column 63, Rule ID: IN_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
...ues that help to innovate something new in future. First of all, I would like to conside...
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Line 6, column 89, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'learned', 'learnt'.
Suggestion: learned; learnt
...e of primary school. Where children are learn something new, but it is a part of the...
^^^^^
Line 10, column 30, Rule ID: IN_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
... are very optimistic to do a something in future. But formal education does not allowed ...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 10, column 71, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[3]
Message: The verb 'does' requires base form of the verb: 'allow'
Suggestion: allow
...n future. But formal education does not allowed to flourish student own ability. Seoc...
^^^^^^^
Line 10, column 79, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[2]
Message: Did you mean 'flourishing'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'allow' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: flourishing
.... But formal education does not allowed to flourish student own ability. Seocnd, In the c...
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Line 13, column 17, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[3]
Message: The verb 'does' requires base form of the verb: 'allow'
Suggestion: allow
...nventional educational system does not allowed to do a best in future. For example, In...
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Line 13, column 31, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[1]
Message: Use 'the' with the superlative.
Suggestion: the
...cational system does not allowed to do a best in future. For example, In compute...
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Line 13, column 38, Rule ID: IN_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
...l system does not allowed to do a best in future. For example, In computer science strea...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...students feel hamper with it own skill. Also some students are good in Machine lear...
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Line 17, column 85, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'students'' or 'student's'?
Suggestion: students'; student's
...y important for AI students due to this students growth in particular subject are becom...
^^^^^^^^
Line 20, column 78, Rule ID: THE_SOME_DAY[1]
Message: Did you mean 'same'?
Suggestion: same
...rovide a way to think and left with the some clues of future science. Also formal e...
^^^^
Line 21, column 17, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...with the some clues of future science. Also formal education system provide a basic...
^^^^
Line 21, column 54, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[4]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'basic knowledge'.
Suggestion: basic knowledge
...e. Also formal education system provide a basic knowledge that is require to become a solid dept...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 21, column 80, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'required'.
Suggestion: required
...ystem provide a basic knowledge that is require to become a solid depth knowledge. For...
^^^^^^^
Line 21, column 88, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'becoming'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'require' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: becoming
...ovide a basic knowledge that is require to become a solid depth knowledge. For example in...
^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, nevertheless, so, still, for example, in conclusion, in particular, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.5258426966 82% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 12.4196629213 16% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 14.8657303371 128% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.3162921348 62% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 19.0 33.0505617978 57% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 58.6224719101 84% => OK
Nominalization: 22.0 12.9106741573 170% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2258.0 2235.4752809 101% => OK
No of words: 420.0 442.535393258 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.37619047619 5.05705443957 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52701905584 4.55969084622 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72992985382 2.79657885939 98% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 215.323595506 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.469047619048 0.4932671777 95% => OK
syllable_count: 702.9 704.065955056 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 0.0 4.99550561798 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.77640449438 338% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.38483146067 160% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.2370786517 114% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 23.0359550562 78% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 47.2446474299 60.3974514979 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.1739130435 118.986275619 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.2608695652 23.4991977007 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.82608695652 5.21951772744 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 29.0 4.97078651685 583% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 16.0 7.80617977528 205% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 10.2758426966 136% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.83258426966 145% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.250993484404 0.243740707755 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0758135276119 0.0831039109588 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.103251320814 0.0758088955206 136% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0674576347916 0.150359130593 45% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0891705065127 0.0667264976115 134% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 14.1392134831 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 48.8420337079 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.1743820225 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.92 12.1639044944 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.95 8.38706741573 95% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 100.480337079 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.8971910112 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.2143820225 82% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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