Governments must ensure that their major cities receive the financial support they need in order
to thrive, because it is primarily in cities that a nation's cultural traditions are preserved and
generated.
This is a very sensitive issue and it is difficult for us to decide the role of governments. There are
many issues in this statement that need to be addressed. The first question is whether the actual
culture and traditions is in big cities or small towns and villages. The second thing is that
whether it is really a government's duty to subsidize cultural traditions. The author claims that
governments should ensure that their major cities receive the financial support they need to
preserve the nation's cultural traditions. However, preserving cultures should not be the single
reason to develop major cities. This is not only for preservation of nation's culture but also for
the reason of developing the whole society.
There is no doubt that major cities are the principal force when constructing a healthy country
and their development directly reflects the development of the country. Major cities primarily
generate a nation's cultural traditions and makes it famous in the world. However, it is actually
towns and villages where cultural traditions originate and are preserved and any government that
pays attention to its cultural traditions should neither neglect nor ignore those places. Hence,
these small places should receive equal if not more financial support than major cities. The
culture and tradition maintained in these places might be much more integrated and purer than in
counterpart cities. Therefore, in order to protect their cultural traditions, governments should
support tradition-based towns and villages rather than invest a lot to the cities, which have little
traditional foundation.
If we take the example of Hong Kong, it used to be a small fishing village 150 years ago. After it
became the colony of the Great Britain, Hong Kong has developed gradually and has established
as a financial center in Asia. Therefore, from its present, nobody can assert that Chinese cultural
traditions are generated in Hong Kong. Hong Kong developed completely according to the style
of the capitalism country, during the reign of Britain, although the majority of residents were
Chinese, who are known for preserving their culture and traditions. The Chinese culture is not
preserved in Hong Kong, hence there is no point in providing financial support to Hong Kong
just for the culture's sake. However, as it is a major financial and shopping hub, it attracts people
from all over the world and it is a great source of revenue for the government. Hence, the
government of China has to patronize it to maintain its importance.
However, while major cities are the resource of one country's culture, the major part of
population in many countries lives in villages. In cities, most people are doing salary-based jobs
and in villages, most of the people are farmers. The government of a country has to take care ofboth the sides to keep balance in society. To construct major cities, the rural places should not be
ignored.
The cultural traditions are the backbone of a nation and they should be preserved. However,
major cities and rural areas should get equal attention from the governments.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 24, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'governments'' or 'government's'?
Suggestion: governments'; government's
...d thing is that whether it is really a governments duty to subsidize cultural traditions. ...
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Line 4, column 75, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
... duty to subsidize cultural traditions. The author claims that governments should ...
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Line 11, column 10, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a nation' or simply 'nations'?
Suggestion: a nation; nations
...untry. Major cities primarily generate a nations cultural traditions and makes it famous...
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Line 26, column 14, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'cultures'' or 'culture's'?
Suggestion: cultures'; culture's
...cial support to Hong Kong just for the cultures sake. However, as it is a major financi...
^^^^^^^^
Discourse Markers used:
['actually', 'also', 'but', 'first', 'hence', 'however', 'if', 'really', 'second', 'so', 'therefore', 'while', 'as to', 'no doubt']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.253597122302 0.240241500013 106% => OK
Verbs: 0.14928057554 0.157235817809 95% => OK
Adjectives: 0.102517985612 0.0880659088768 116% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0503597122302 0.0497285424764 101% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0377697841727 0.0444667217837 85% => OK
Prepositions: 0.107913669065 0.12292977631 88% => OK
Participles: 0.0305755395683 0.0406280797675 75% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.74639658361 2.79330140395 98% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0287769784173 0.030933414821 93% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.0016655270985 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.106115107914 0.0997080785238 106% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0179856115108 0.0249443105267 72% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0107913669065 0.0148568991511 73% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 3141.0 2732.02544248 115% => OK
No of words: 507.0 452.878318584 112% => OK
Chars per words: 6.19526627219 6.0361032391 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.74517233601 4.58838876751 103% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.392504930966 0.366273622748 107% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.297830374753 0.280924506359 106% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.224852071006 0.200843997647 112% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.14201183432 0.132149295362 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74639658361 2.79330140395 98% => OK
Unique words: 228.0 219.290929204 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.449704142012 0.48968727796 92% => OK
Word variations: 51.5951937886 55.4138127331 93% => OK
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6194690265 126% => OK
Sentence length: 19.5 23.380412469 83% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.681980733 59.4972553346 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.807692308 141.124799967 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.5 23.380412469 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.538461538462 0.674092028746 80% => OK
Paragraphs: 33.0 4.94800884956 667% => There are something wrong with the essay format.
Language errors: 4.0 5.21349557522 77% => OK
Readability: 49.2830374753 51.4728631049 96% => OK
Elegance: 1.65151515152 1.64882698954 100% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.4182680985 0.391690518653 107% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.137631416131 0.123202303941 112% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0669373260331 0.077325440228 87% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.706560917534 0.547984918172 129% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.259948098365 0.149214159877 174% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.165929932203 0.161403998019 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0918508437807 0.0892212321368 103% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.109658086461 0.385218514788 28% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0735885689168 0.0692045440612 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.146002296324 0.275328986314 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.088582099675 0.0653680567796 136% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.4325221239 86% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.30420353982 57% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 14.0 4.88274336283 287% => Less neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 8.0 7.22455752212 111% => OK
Negative topic words: 2.0 3.66592920354 55% => OK
Neutral topic words: 14.0 2.70907079646 517% => Less neutral topic words wanted.
Total topic words: 24.0 13.5995575221 176% => OK
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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