Both military and arts are important to a country. The military positioning of a country is important with respect to the security of the country and the citizens. Arts has a twofold importance. On one hand, it is important for the preservation of the socio-cultural aspects of a country, and on the other hand, art maintains the creativity among people. It provides a way to express oneself and is an important means to grow intellectually.
Arts has an impact on the nation's economy too. In today's world, sharing and savouring the art forms across borders has become very common with the advent of technology. This not only helps in dissipating information about a country's culture but also in adding to the economy of the country in the form of revenue from sale of arts (movies, books, paintings, music records etc) as well as by increasing revenue from tourism.
For instance, it is not a mere coincidence that, in the late 1990s when the television was just reaching the houses in the developing countries, the youth of these countries was dreaming the American dream of moving to the US for growth and better life. The propeller for the American dream were the various art forms available to the youth. The movies, the American setting in the books and even the lyrics of the songs helped them visualise how America might be the place that helps one realize their dreams.
While it is important to invest in both military and arts, it might be an overstatement to say that a
government must at all times invest as much in the arts as in the military. Had we been living in a utopian world where the countries were at peace and there were no wars, it would have made sense to invest wholly in arts , since there would have been no use of a military.
On a contrary, given today's situation of the world where a number of countries are at war, it becomes ever more crucial to have a well-knit and well-deployed military network across the country, particularly at the borders. A sound military system is an eminent proofing against any kind of attack over a country, be it by another nation or by terrorists. In the last decade itself, militaries of a number of countries have successfully curbed or fought against an attack on their country by terrorists. For example, the 2008 Mumbai attack in India, where a number of people were kept hostages in more than one building, and the terrorists were causing havoc on the streets and the railway stations, would have been impossible to stop without a quick-to-react military system. A well trained military is indispensable not only to fight the terror attacks, but also prevent or fight attack by another country.
Although it is necessary to invest in both arts and military, the amount of investing is a rather subjective choice. It not only depends on the social, political structure of the country but also on the macro-problems that are being faced by the rest of the world, like terrorism. In a nutshell, it can be said that investing as much in the arts as in the military is not a universally true solution, and can only be resolved by considering the various factors affecting the social, economical, political and security perspectives of the country.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, so, well, while, for example, for instance, kind of, as well as, with respect to, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 29.0 19.5258426966 149% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.4196629213 64% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 14.8657303371 141% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.3162921348 80% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 25.0 33.0505617978 76% => OK
Preposition: 90.0 58.6224719101 154% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 12.9106741573 70% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2670.0 2235.4752809 119% => OK
No of words: 558.0 442.535393258 126% => OK
Chars per words: 4.78494623656 5.05705443957 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.86024933743 4.55969084622 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79417470654 2.79657885939 100% => OK
Unique words: 256.0 215.323595506 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.458781362007 0.4932671777 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 844.2 704.065955056 120% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 6.24550561798 144% => OK
Article: 9.0 4.99550561798 180% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.38483146067 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.2370786517 104% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 23.0359550562 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 70.8651429176 60.3974514979 117% => OK
Chars per sentence: 127.142857143 118.986275619 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.5714285714 23.4991977007 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.42857142857 5.21951772744 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 7.0 4.97078651685 141% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 6.0 7.80617977528 77% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 5.13820224719 175% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0945206839706 0.243740707755 39% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0342269510754 0.0831039109588 41% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0336519578083 0.0758088955206 44% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0518416422258 0.150359130593 34% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.028695462256 0.0667264976115 43% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 14.1392134831 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 48.8420337079 110% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.1743820225 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.74 12.1639044944 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.29 8.38706741573 99% => OK
difficult_words: 119.0 100.480337079 118% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 11.8971910112 63% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.2143820225 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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