Instilling a sense of cooperation in young people is, if not the best, a very good way to prepare them for
leadership roles.
It may be true that competition hinders mutual development of peers
and as a result younger generation may find themselves underprepared
for the challenges they face in their careers in their respective fields. But, the above argument may not
be necessarily true in all the circumstances.
Competition may instill hostility towards each other among peers. If some youngsters are successful
and are gaining
importance, their less successful peers may have intense jealousy towards the successful person. This can
create rift
among them, thus hindering mutual sharing of experiences. Even the most successful person can gain knowledge
and experience by discussion.
That said, competition is not always bad, if taken in the right spirit. Success of one person may
encourage others to to better him/her. This mutual sense of competition encourages each individual to perform
better than the others. For, instance if we consider sports, a sense of competition may encourage a peer of Usain
Bolt to break his world record of running hundered meters in 9.68 seconds. This is definitely a good sign for
improvement of the sport. This can be true even in the case of government, industry or any other field. A sense of
competition among elected represtatives can lead to greater development of their respective constituencies. Each
elected representative in this case strives hard to perform better than others. This is true even in
workplaces. If the best
employee is awarded, recognized and if incentives are provided to him/her, this leads to growth of individuals
as well as the firm they are working in.
It is important not to get carried away by the positives mentioned in the previous paragraph.
Some might
argue that a sense of competition can sometimes prove fatal. If an individual, after repeated failures, comes
to a conlusion that he/she can never be better than his/her counterpart, then he/she may withdraw all efforts
at
improvement. An individual can get totally demoralized. This can have a negative bearing on the succeful person
as well. The successful person now has no competitors and he/she may never try to to improve.
Instead if there was cooperation amongst them, it would have been better for both.
All in all, it seems that instilling either competition or cooperation among young people has both
advantages
and disadvantages as oulined in the previous paragaraphs. It is thus very important to strike a right balance
between
the two. Too much cooperation without competition as well as too much competition without cooperation can
prove to be fatal.
when a piece of work in produced in a field, who is qualified to critique it? No doubt experts within the field have valid opinions, but who else? In my view, whether a critique from a complete outsider if valuable is a question that depends on the nature of the field, which requires more careful examination.
In rigorous sciences, laymen do not have much contribution. A few years ago, a folk scientist alleged that he had established the existence of gravitational waves. it become quite a story when a couple of years ago the gravitational waves was finally experimentally proven to exist. Media everywhere spread that folk scientist’s old story as if he was some sort of prophet. Insiders take him as, well, a joker. you can say black holes exist or do not; you can say whether the number of stars in the universe is odd or even; you can also claim that Einstein’s theory of relativity is right or wrong. you can say whatever you want, but it is does not mater, because science does not need opinion, but proof based on observation and sound logic. Anything involving flawed reasoning or incomplete data, no matter how correct it turns out, fails to stand as a sound theory. Thus, an outsider, without the necessary training or data, contributes literally nothing to this rigorous practice.
The complete opposite is professional sports. The year 2018 was the year of the soccer world cup, the festival for countless “soccer fans” who have only heard the names of two players. they randomly watched a game and decided to support, say, team Germany, and condemn the team for failing to qualify. Or they saw Mbappe, the promising kid from France, dive, and lambasted him for lacking sportsmanship. Or they watched the only game in their, the finals, and were convinced that the referee held bias against Croatia. do their opinion matter? These people hardly know a thing about soccer, but ironically, they matter, even more that those fans that have watched the Champions League their entire lives. Being the most influential sport on earth. soccer establishes its dominance not just because of its most loyas fans, but also because of its continual attraction to new fans. The world cup is a carnival for everyone, beginners or experts. The collective celebration, whether rational or impulsive, is what keeps soccer’s influence pervasive and persistent.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, if, so, thus, well, no doubt, sort of, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 19.5258426966 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 12.4196629213 40% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 14.8657303371 135% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.3162921348 115% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 33.0505617978 103% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 58.6224719101 60% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 10.0 12.9106741573 77% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2009.0 2235.4752809 90% => OK
No of words: 398.0 442.535393258 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.04773869347 5.05705443957 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46653527281 4.55969084622 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82172885542 2.79657885939 101% => OK
Unique words: 245.0 215.323595506 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.615577889447 0.4932671777 125% => OK
syllable_count: 611.1 704.065955056 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 11.0 4.99550561798 220% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 10.0 1.77640449438 563% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.2370786517 114% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 23.0359550562 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 43.7380931678 60.3974514979 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.347826087 118.986275619 73% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.3043478261 23.4991977007 74% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.0 5.21951772744 57% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.97078651685 60% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 10.0 7.80617977528 128% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 5.13820224719 117% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.83258426966 145% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0197803496691 0.243740707755 8% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.00519017597051 0.0831039109588 6% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0144881808058 0.0758088955206 19% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0105502360855 0.150359130593 7% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0149202869583 0.0667264976115 22% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 14.1392134831 78% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 48.8420337079 128% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 12.1743820225 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.71 12.1639044944 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.84 8.38706741573 105% => OK
difficult_words: 110.0 100.480337079 109% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.8971910112 71% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.2143820225 78% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum four paragraphs wanted.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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