Issue: the luxuries and conveniences of contemporary life prevent people from developing into truly strong and independent individuals.
Some people believe that the luxuries and conveniences of modern lifestyle will definitely prevent them from developing strong and independent individuals. But this statement is not accurately correct all the time. I believe that there are enormous advantages of modern lifestyle with respect to luxuries and conveniences.
First, from my perspective, I would say, luxuries and comfort will certainly make ones strong and independent individual. For instance, consider mobile technology, in this case users of mobile phone can easily communicate with each other even if they are so far away from each other. Here, mobile communication is blessing for peoples, because they don't have to travel far away to send their massages.
Furthermore, people who are pursuing rich, luxurious lifestyle will definitely become strong and independent individuals. Mostly rich peoples are used to good behavior, etiquettes because they have strong reputation in society. In order to remain their reputation persistent they have to behave nicely with society. So, behaving nicely with people, having some good etiquettes is part self-investment and it'll certainly makes them strong and powerful individuals.
Finally, we cannot make end by saying that luxuries and conveniences of modern life will prevent people from developing them strong and independent individuals. Because there are so many benefits of luxuries and comfort of modern life.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 349, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...n is blessing for peoples, because they dont have to travel far away to send their m...
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Line 2, column 392, Rule ID: MASSAGE_MESSAGE[1]
Message: Did you mean 'messages'?
Suggestion: messages
...t have to travel far away to send their massages. Furthermore, people who are pursuing ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, furthermore, if, so, for instance, with respect to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 19.5258426966 41% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.4196629213 56% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 14.8657303371 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.3162921348 35% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 18.0 33.0505617978 54% => OK
Preposition: 24.0 58.6224719101 41% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 6.0 12.9106741573 46% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1220.0 2235.4752809 55% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 215.0 442.535393258 49% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.67441860465 5.05705443957 112% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.82921379641 4.55969084622 84% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.94146977827 2.79657885939 105% => OK
Unique words: 119.0 215.323595506 55% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.553488372093 0.4932671777 112% => OK
syllable_count: 391.5 704.065955056 56% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.59117977528 113% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 6.24550561798 48% => OK
Article: 0.0 4.99550561798 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 20.2370786517 59% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 17.0 23.0359550562 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 32.4400087341 60.3974514979 54% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 101.666666667 118.986275619 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.9166666667 23.4991977007 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.91666666667 5.21951772744 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 5.13820224719 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.324550252032 0.243740707755 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.13326701386 0.0831039109588 160% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.152735459575 0.0758088955206 201% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.230524051811 0.150359130593 153% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.122817495027 0.0667264976115 184% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 14.1392134831 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.3 48.8420337079 76% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.1743820225 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.31 12.1639044944 126% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.0 8.38706741573 95% => OK
difficult_words: 48.0 100.480337079 48% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.2143820225 78% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 33.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 2.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.