The luxuries and conveniences of contemporary life prevent people from developing into truly strong and independent individuals.
It is human nature to seek for comfort and convenience, and this craving for comfort has resulted in invention of various techniques and technologies that can help us remain in comfort zone. However, the provision of luxuries and conveniences has made us highly dependent and weak individuals in many ways.
Firstly, for any one to grow as a strong being it is necessary to face struggle, which teaches us various ways to cope up with difficult situations. Most of the well-renowned personalities in this twenty-first century have faced one or the other predicaments in their early age, that helped them growing as a strong and successful personality. Dr. Abdul Kalam, famous president of India, for instance, was born in a poor fisherman’s family; he had to struggle hard to join hands to mouth. There were no any luxuries and conveniences that he could tap into to make his life easier. But, the same struggle made him a strong man; he developed strength to face difficult situation bravely, that made him capable to be the head of one of the largest nation (president of India) and one of the well-renowned scientists of his era. However, as of now, even a poor family in nook and corner of the world possesses a phone and television in their home. Children don’t have to struggle too hard for getting education. Consequently, they cannot learn lessons of struggle that makes it unlikely for them to grow as a strong being.
Even for the richer part of population of the world, luxuries and conveniences have made them unlikely to grow up as a strong being. In my grandfather’s period, for instance, there were no vehicles-let alone sophisticated cars as of now- to move from one place to another even for richer population of country, and taking a long day walk, he reminisces, would help them to know about different places, and also help them come to terms with hardship that poorer population were bearing. The hardship of talking a long walk, he says, was alone a great lesson for them, that made them resilient to small troubles during other times. But we have access to vehicle at our arms length and have never borne the brunt of walking a full-day journey, that makes us vulnerable to trivial problems that we face in our life.
Similarly, as these technologies have made our lives so easier, we are becoming more and more dependent on them and cannot live a single day without these luxuries at our arms length. Our grandfather, for instance, passed almost half of their age without electricity, phones or televisions. I, however, cannot imagine a single day without these facilities.
So, though luxuries and conveniences have made our life easier to a great extent, they have disabled us to grow as a strong and independent human beings.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 14, Rule ID: ANY_BODY[1]
Message: Did you mean 'anyone'?
Suggestion: anyone
...dividuals in many ways. Firstly, for any one to grow as a strong being it is necessa...
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Line 3, column 297, Rule ID: ADVISE_VBG[9]
Message: The verb 'help' is used with infinitive: 'to grow' or 'grow'.
Suggestion: to grow; grow
...ts in their early age, that helped them growing as a strong and successful personality....
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Line 3, column 506, Rule ID: NOW[2]
Message: Did you mean 'now' (=at this moment) instead of 'no' (negation)?
Suggestion: now
...hard to join hands to mouth. There were no any luxuries and conveniences that he c...
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Line 3, column 1057, Rule ID: LEARN_NNNNS_ON_DO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'to'?
Suggestion: to
...Consequently, they cannot learn lessons of struggle that makes it unlikely for the...
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Line 5, column 628, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...resilient to small troubles during other times. But we have access to vehicle at ...
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Line 9, column 155, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... a strong and independent human beings.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, firstly, however, if, similarly, so, well, for instance, to a great extent
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 19.5258426966 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.4196629213 48% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 14.8657303371 141% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.3162921348 88% => OK
Pronoun: 54.0 33.0505617978 163% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 65.0 58.6224719101 111% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 12.9106741573 77% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2305.0 2235.4752809 103% => OK
No of words: 472.0 442.535393258 107% => OK
Chars per words: 4.88347457627 5.05705443957 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.6610686524 4.55969084622 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87582657391 2.79657885939 103% => OK
Unique words: 235.0 215.323595506 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.497881355932 0.4932671777 101% => OK
syllable_count: 720.9 704.065955056 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 6.24550561798 208% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 4.38483146067 23% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.2370786517 89% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 23.0359550562 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 66.7468268076 60.3974514979 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.055555556 118.986275619 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.2222222222 23.4991977007 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.88888888889 5.21951772744 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 7.80617977528 77% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 5.13820224719 136% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.118713681443 0.243740707755 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0437938466506 0.0831039109588 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0575533613307 0.0758088955206 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0780740851233 0.150359130593 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0552081902041 0.0667264976115 83% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.7 14.1392134831 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 48.8420337079 110% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.1743820225 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.32 12.1639044944 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.2 8.38706741573 98% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 100.480337079 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 11.8971910112 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.2143820225 111% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.7820224719 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.