The prompt urges that luxuries and conveniences of comtemporary life prevent people from developing into truly strong and independent individuals. I mostly agree with this claim and will elaborate on the necessary points to defend my stance.
To begin with, many of the luxurious and convenient inventions that we all use daily take away from our ability to develop certain strengths and independence. For example, the invention of Global Positioning System(GPS) on cell phones has taken away our need to navigate ourselves using maps and have led to individuals having a lack of sense of direction. It is no longer paramount to know your surroundings nor is it necessary to know how to get around without the luxury and convenience of our cellular devices. These skills are important to know in case of emergency and we don't have access to the technology we are so accustomed to having at our fingertips at all times.
In addition, aside from using mobile navigation systems, other things have prevented people from developing independence and strength. The invention of supermarkets have erased the need for foraging for food. The need to know how to hunt has essentially been erased from urban population areas. If grocery stores were ever forced to close down, people would end up starving if they don't have a storage of non-perishable foods. The ability to hunt and gather food is another quality of a strong and independent person that nearly ceases to exist in big cities.
On the other hand, in contrast to my position, the same things that prevent people from having independent and strong qualities are the same items that help us become stronger. Navigation on cell phones make sure that we don't get lost and end up needing help. Same for the endlessly seeming accessibility to food, this ensures that the majority of a nation's population goes without starving. However, it would benefit everyone to learn how to be efficient traveling without the help of our smart devices and be able to feed ourselves without the need to visit a store in case of an emergency.
In conclusion, although it is true that the items I have described may be helpful in many ways, it would benefit the majority of society to learn how survive without these items I have described for the reasons that I have discussed.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, may, so, for example, in addition, in conclusion, in contrast, in contrast to, it is true, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 19.5258426966 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.4196629213 72% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 14.8657303371 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.3162921348 80% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 38.0 33.0505617978 115% => OK
Preposition: 68.0 58.6224719101 116% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 12.9106741573 93% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1928.0 2235.4752809 86% => OK
No of words: 391.0 442.535393258 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.93094629156 5.05705443957 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44676510885 4.55969084622 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75433678026 2.79657885939 98% => OK
Unique words: 203.0 215.323595506 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.519181585678 0.4932671777 105% => OK
syllable_count: 618.3 704.065955056 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.99550561798 120% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.2370786517 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 23.0359550562 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.8298824291 60.3974514979 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.5 118.986275619 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.4375 23.4991977007 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.5 5.21951772744 163% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.245554215248 0.243740707755 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0926689460597 0.0831039109588 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.162226062791 0.0758088955206 214% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.157601829652 0.150359130593 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.149603010989 0.0667264976115 224% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 14.1392134831 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 48.8420337079 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.1743820225 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.61 12.1639044944 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.38 8.38706741573 100% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 100.480337079 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 11.8971910112 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.2143820225 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 75.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.5 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.