The luxuries and conveniences of contemporary life prevent people from developing into truly strong and independent individuals.
Stating that the luxuries and conveniences of contemporary life prevent from developing into truly strong and independent people, this view claims that the development of technology is harmful to the individual's autonomous capabilities. In some senses, it is true that modern fast lifestyle makes people dependent on machines. In my point, however, when it comes to science and art, especially movie, their merits is helpful to make a progress about human abilities.
Of course, few people disagree that people depend on the expedience of our inventions more and more as time past. As technology have been developed, they have taken the people's job to do. For example, as smart-phone save other's phone number and addresses, we don't have to remember them. This implies that result of industrialization replaces our positions with themselves.
Nonetheless, can we say that the machines always abet human abilities to solve problems by ourselves? My answer is no. In scientific researches, the machines are the only acolyte of human work. Even if, scientists can research faster than before, deciding what kind of research facilities could be used is up to the researchers.
Moreover, in film-making, computer graphic strengthen our view of the fictional world. As the part of art have developed, the directors could make the more realistic movie such as 'Jurassic Park', 'Transformers'. Through these movies, we can widen our imagines and these imagines make scientists possible to bring the fiction world into reality. This shows that the developed technology don't always hinder inventive thinking
To summarize, it is not deniable that human's ability to deal with simple jobs have decelerated by modern technologies. However, about scientific researches and art, it is hard to say the technologies always limit human
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, moreover, nonetheless, so, then, for example, kind of, of course, such as, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 19.5258426966 51% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 12.4196629213 40% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 14.8657303371 47% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.3162921348 80% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 31.0 33.0505617978 94% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 58.6224719101 67% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 12.9106741573 39% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1542.0 2235.4752809 69% => OK
No of words: 285.0 442.535393258 64% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.41052631579 5.05705443957 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10876417139 4.55969084622 90% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.97982133358 2.79657885939 107% => OK
Unique words: 177.0 215.323595506 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.621052631579 0.4932671777 126% => OK
syllable_count: 478.8 704.065955056 68% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 6.24550561798 176% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.38483146067 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.2370786517 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 17.0 23.0359550562 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 49.9687011413 60.3974514979 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.375 118.986275619 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.8125 23.4991977007 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.125 5.21951772744 117% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 7.80617977528 77% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 10.2758426966 68% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.83258426966 124% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.177566665615 0.243740707755 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0474474675497 0.0831039109588 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.127641881931 0.0758088955206 168% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.091834859 0.150359130593 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.138978430386 0.0667264976115 208% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 14.1392134831 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 45.76 48.8420337079 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.1743820225 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.8 12.1639044944 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.36 8.38706741573 112% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 100.480337079 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 11.8971910112 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.2143820225 78% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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More content wanted.
Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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