Many people believe that a few individuals or small groups (family, friends, teachers, celebrities, for example) have caused them to think and behave in the way they do. Yet it is always society as a whole that defines us and our attitudes, not a few individuals."
The author stayed in the side that the society as a whole that make us and shaped our personalities. He implied that the effects of the people that we are grown up nearby have a little if no effect with comparing to the society as a whole. I cannot see totally what the author trying to convince. Small group or individual in our life have a role that cannot be ignored in our life.
The role that individual or small group play in our live is immense. The family are the base that make many of our values. When we come up to the society the first place that we say our first words in our family. Parents try to ingress some value such as honest and moral behavior in their children from the day they are able to recognize the right from the wrong. Upon going to school, it is the family and friends who are now contributing with the family in changing our behavior or attitudes. Though, this cannot be stated as many student do not have the willingness to engage or they may just have taught from their parents not to engage, it is still vital. Having a dearest friend or lovely teacher was always effect may attitude toward a situation. Further, if we consider the exposing of us to TV programs or the like, then coping the characteristics of our favor character is quite often.
However, One may argue that the society as a whole who is the responsible on our attitudes. I can agree with is given the fact that people who effected from the society are largely engaged in and have the willingness to change their personalities. As we grow we are responsible for activities. We can recognize the right from the wrong. We also sometimes needs an advice that we can have from our nearby people. Take the example of the youth crime. It sometimes argued that one of the most known reason is their isolating from the family or the adverse effects that their friend have on them. It is their environment they lived in.
Therefore, it can be concluded that the individual or small group represented by family, friends, teachers or celebrities have the largest effect on our attitudes that the whole society could.
- If a society is to thrive, it must put its own overall success before the well-being of itsindividual citizens 50
- A school or college should pay its teachers at the same rate in all disciplines, regardless of differences in salaries for related fields in the world outside of school. For example, entry-level teachers in mathematics and in the arts should receive the s 50
- Many people believe that a few individuals or small groups (family, friends, teachers, celebrities, for example) have caused them to think and behave in the way they do. Yet it is always society as a whole that defines us and our attitudes, not a few indi 50
- If a society is to thrive, it must put its own overall success before the well-being of itsindividual citizens 50
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 81, Rule ID: MASS_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error - use third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: 'is'.
Suggestion: is
...play in our live is immense. The family are the base that make many of our values. ...
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Line 3, column 124, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “When” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... the base that make many of our values. When we come up to the society the first pla...
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Line 3, column 530, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun student seems to be countable; consider using: 'many students'.
Suggestion: many students
...tudes. Though, this cannot be stated as many student do not have the willingness to engage o...
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Line 3, column 670, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[1]
Message: Use 'the' with the superlative.
Suggestion: the
...ot to engage, it is still vital. Having a dearest friend or lovely teacher was al...
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Line 5, column 362, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[1]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'advice'.
Suggestion: advice
...from the wrong. We also sometimes needs an advice that we can have from our nearby people...
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Line 6, column 194, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...attitudes that the whole society could.
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'first', 'however', 'if', 'may', 'so', 'still', 'then', 'therefore', 'such as']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.201923076923 0.240241500013 84% => OK
Verbs: 0.165865384615 0.157235817809 105% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0576923076923 0.0880659088768 66% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0576923076923 0.0497285424764 116% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0985576923077 0.0444667217837 222% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.120192307692 0.12292977631 98% => OK
Participles: 0.0384615384615 0.0406280797675 95% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.48323050633 2.79330140395 89% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0240384615385 0.030933414821 78% => OK
Particles: 0.00240384615385 0.0016655270985 144% => OK
Determiners: 0.112980769231 0.0997080785238 113% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0264423076923 0.0249443105267 106% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0240384615385 0.0148568991511 162% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2120.0 2732.02544248 78% => OK
No of words: 383.0 452.878318584 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.53524804178 6.0361032391 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.42384287591 4.58838876751 96% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.300261096606 0.366273622748 82% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.190600522193 0.280924506359 68% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.11227154047 0.200843997647 56% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0757180156658 0.132149295362 57% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.48323050633 2.79330140395 89% => OK
Unique words: 178.0 219.290929204 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.464751958225 0.48968727796 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 49.0856538261 55.4138127331 89% => OK
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6194690265 102% => OK
Sentence length: 18.2380952381 23.380412469 78% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.7970481849 59.4972553346 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.952380952 141.124799967 72% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.2380952381 23.380412469 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.52380952381 0.674092028746 78% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.94800884956 81% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.21349557522 115% => OK
Readability: 37.2981474574 51.4728631049 72% => OK
Elegance: 1.11940298507 1.64882698954 68% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.404155690631 0.391690518653 103% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.140076972813 0.123202303941 114% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.105980008427 0.077325440228 137% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.512225717875 0.547984918172 93% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.186537999554 0.149214159877 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.159790391241 0.161403998019 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.076508306582 0.0892212321368 86% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.519761659132 0.385218514788 135% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0922512206145 0.0692045440612 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.311361264903 0.275328986314 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0220669012035 0.0653680567796 34% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.4325221239 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.30420353982 94% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88274336283 82% => OK
Positive topic words: 9.0 7.22455752212 125% => OK
Negative topic words: 3.0 3.66592920354 82% => OK
Neutral topic words: 3.0 2.70907079646 111% => OK
Total topic words: 15.0 13.5995575221 110% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: This is not the final score. The e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.