"Most people would agree that buildings represent a valuable record of any society's past, but
controversy arises when old buildings stand on ground that modern planners feel could be
better used for modern purposes. In such situations, modern development should be given
precedence over the preservation of historic buildings so that contemporary needs can be
served."
Infrastructural objects such as buildings, bridge and statues work as most effective ways to represent histories and pasts symbolically. The author claims that, despite the fact that buildings represent valuable records, to meet up contemporary needs historic buildings should be replaced by modern development. I think the author overgeneralized the topic. In my opinion, the decision of the dominance of modern development over archaic establishments should be varied from case to case and I mostly disagree with the author’s statement.
History plays many important roles. It teaches us valuable life lessons through incidents .And monument such as buildings play crucial role in that case. However not every archaic buildings reflects the past of a society. Ancient buildings may reflect the past structural aesthetic beauty of the establishments of society but don’t necessarily symbolize any historical incident and movement. In that case, the modern development and necessity should replace the ancient infrastructure as necessity changes the door of opportunity gets bigger with the passage of time. For example, a building built 100 years ago only to serve artistic and aesthetic beauty, today can be replaced to fulfill more practical purposes such as a renovating or building a science lab.
Contrastingly, buildings with valuable historical pasts shouldn’t be replaced with modern development. In the fast growing world, though modern development are needed for the human race to evolve into more advanced species and make this world technologically, economically a better place to live in, Histories are also equally important to keep us connected with our roots, remind us of our ancestors, our pasts and from where we began . Ancient museums might be a good relevant example to be given. Ancient museums are the reflection of the forgone priceless times and incidents. Therefore, in this case ancient buildings that contain immeasurable and irreplaceable historical values can’t be buried down to ground for the purpose of meeting modern development and newly arisen needs.
In summary, When question arises whether to replace old buildings to fulfill modern necessity or development the decision will be taken considering the artistic historical values of those old establishment and the value of the modern necessity both.
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Comments
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 89, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
... valuable life lessons through incidents .And monument such as buildings play cruc...
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Line 2, column 91, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: And
...aluable life lessons through incidents .And monument such as buildings play crucial...
^^^
Line 2, column 154, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
...ildings play crucial role in that case. However not every archaic buildings reflects th...
^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 188, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...lopment are needed for the human race to evolve into more advanced species and ma...
^^
Line 3, column 436, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...stors, our pasts and from where we began . Ancient museums might be a good relevan...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, may, so, therefore, for example, i think, in summary, such as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 19.5258426966 56% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.4196629213 64% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 14.8657303371 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.3162921348 62% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 19.0 33.0505617978 57% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 58.6224719101 82% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 12.9106741573 116% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1995.0 2235.4752809 89% => OK
No of words: 357.0 442.535393258 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.58823529412 5.05705443957 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34677393335 4.55969084622 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.07385577206 2.79657885939 110% => OK
Unique words: 205.0 215.323595506 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.574229691877 0.4932671777 116% => OK
syllable_count: 616.5 704.065955056 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 6.24550561798 48% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.38483146067 160% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.2370786517 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 78.5540220167 60.3974514979 130% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.6875 118.986275619 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.3125 23.4991977007 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.25 5.21951772744 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.348765405749 0.243740707755 143% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.106819921497 0.0831039109588 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0730578729818 0.0758088955206 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.222907788543 0.150359130593 148% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00696086563457 0.0667264976115 10% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.1 14.1392134831 114% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 48.8420337079 83% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 12.1743820225 108% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.44 12.1639044944 127% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.11 8.38706741573 109% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 100.480337079 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.8971910112 71% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 89, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
... valuable life lessons through incidents .And monument such as buildings play cruc...
^^
Line 2, column 91, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: And
...aluable life lessons through incidents .And monument such as buildings play crucial...
^^^
Line 2, column 154, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
...ildings play crucial role in that case. However not every archaic buildings reflects th...
^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 188, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...lopment are needed for the human race to evolve into more advanced species and ma...
^^
Line 3, column 436, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...stors, our pasts and from where we began . Ancient museums might be a good relevan...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, may, so, therefore, for example, i think, in summary, such as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 19.5258426966 56% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.4196629213 64% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 14.8657303371 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.3162921348 62% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 19.0 33.0505617978 57% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 58.6224719101 82% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 12.9106741573 116% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1995.0 2235.4752809 89% => OK
No of words: 357.0 442.535393258 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.58823529412 5.05705443957 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34677393335 4.55969084622 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.07385577206 2.79657885939 110% => OK
Unique words: 205.0 215.323595506 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.574229691877 0.4932671777 116% => OK
syllable_count: 616.5 704.065955056 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 6.24550561798 48% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.38483146067 160% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.2370786517 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 78.5540220167 60.3974514979 130% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.6875 118.986275619 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.3125 23.4991977007 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.25 5.21951772744 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.348765405749 0.243740707755 143% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.106819921497 0.0831039109588 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0730578729818 0.0758088955206 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.222907788543 0.150359130593 148% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00696086563457 0.0667264976115 10% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.1 14.1392134831 114% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 48.8420337079 83% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 12.1743820225 108% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.44 12.1639044944 127% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.11 8.38706741573 109% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 100.480337079 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.8971910112 71% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.