A nation should require all of its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college.
Different people have different dreams as their future endeavor. Sometimes it may be as simple as helping the weak around them or someone may have a grandiloquent dream of achieving something exceptional and urge to disseminate their achievement throughout the world. The prompt suggust that, a nation should specify a certain curriculem to their students untill college graduation. I strongly disagree with this prompt for two reasons.
What is the prime goal of a nation's education system for educating their students? Some may answer to this question: to ensure the future of the nation as a top ranking country in the world. Other may say it is to upheld the progression of the whole humankind. Whatever the reason is, none could gainsay the fact that creativity is the main factor is achieving the great future people earn for. And according to my reasoning, limiting all of the student's education to a similar curriculum is not only harmful but it also circumscribes creativity buildup. As an example, during the middle ages, a certain number of people, especially the royalities got education. The general pedestrians learned to fight for the country. This is also a kind of education, though a limited one. But in their future, the only thing they can do is to intervene enemy attack and helping the country on related defensive tasks. And if we look at the scientific achievement of the middle ages, we can see that it is also sluggish and directly analogous to the number of people that achieved education. What is the reason for this low productivity? Certainly the restricted education. Similar to this situation, if a nation restricts thier education to a specific goal, it may mitigate their present problems but it also inhibits future achievements as the future is utterly unpredictable. Thus, it is better to give the students independence in choosing what they want for the future.
Secondly, to ensure a country's survival there is in need of an abundant amount of professions. Even in the prehistoric era, when human just invented fire. There is a distinct discrepancy in profession. Some may hund, some may farm, and others may product weapons etc. And the choice of profession is completely dependent on their ability. Thus, for a county's students to be active in helping the country reach a glorious future. They have to be selective in their learning objective. A nationwide singular cirriculum thus prevents this variation.
Although, different cirriculam and independece in learning reaches the possibility that some part of the country may be less educated than other part. But, a nation can ensure fully educated society not just by employing a similar curriculum but by their own effort of proliferating various education commensurate to the student's liking and ensure that they get the proper helping hand they require. Thus, according to my understanding, the prompt may inhibit the nation's future rather ensure proper education.
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- Power prep 2 16
- Argument Topic The following is taken from a memo from the advertising director of the Super Screen Movie Production Company According to a recent report from our marketing department during the past year fewer people attended Super Screen produced movies 58
- We can usually learn much more from people whose views we share than from people whose views contradict our own disagreement can cause stress and inhibit learning 54
- A nation should require all of its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college 50
- Government officials should rely on their own judgment rather than unquestioningly carry out the will of the people they serve 50
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 214, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'disseminating'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'urge' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: disseminating
...chieving something exceptional and urge to disseminate their achievement throughout the world....
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Line 3, column 29, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'nations'' or 'nation's'?
Suggestion: nations'; nation's
...reasons. What is the prime goal of a nations education system for educating their st...
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Line 3, column 436, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
...And according to my reasoning, limiting all of the students education to a similar curricu...
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Line 3, column 447, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'students'' or 'student's'?
Suggestion: students'; student's
...ng to my reasoning, limiting all of the students education to a similar curriculum is no...
^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, look, may, second, secondly, so, thus, in fact, kind of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.5258426966 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.4196629213 129% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 14.8657303371 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.3162921348 62% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 39.0 33.0505617978 118% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 58.6224719101 85% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 12.9106741573 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2486.0 2235.4752809 111% => OK
No of words: 483.0 442.535393258 109% => OK
Chars per words: 5.14699792961 5.05705443957 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.68799114503 4.55969084622 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90989351177 2.79657885939 104% => OK
Unique words: 242.0 215.323595506 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.501035196687 0.4932671777 102% => OK
syllable_count: 785.7 704.065955056 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 8.0 4.99550561798 160% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.77640449438 281% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 29.0 20.2370786517 143% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 23.0359550562 69% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 53.4683165988 60.3974514979 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.724137931 118.986275619 72% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.6551724138 23.4991977007 71% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.41379310345 5.21951772744 46% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 10.2758426966 136% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 5.13820224719 195% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.148550753096 0.243740707755 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0371440924808 0.0831039109588 45% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0620128412104 0.0758088955206 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0944819188331 0.150359130593 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.038614987227 0.0667264976115 58% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 14.1392134831 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 48.8420337079 113% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.1743820225 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.29 12.1639044944 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.55 8.38706741573 102% => OK
difficult_words: 126.0 100.480337079 125% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.8971910112 71% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 11.2143820225 75% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.