The topics at hand states that a nation should mandate its students to study the same curriculum until they enter college.This issue though contentious is a matter of utmost importance, and I concur with it. My reason for this vehement stance is elucidated in the following paragraphs.
Young minds are the future of a nation. They are the ones who have immense potential to help the nation scale new heights. Students' minds are like a clean slate, still in developmental stage, and they can be moulded in any way we want.Hence it is incumbent on the teachers to steer them in the right direction.Sans the right pedagogy, these students can make or break the nation.Hence, it is necessary that all students study the same national curriculum until they enter college. The government with the help of experts and erudite scholars must design the appropriate syllabus, that will ensure that all students receive the same basic knowledge; once the basics are clear, they are free to choose their field of interest for higher education.This helps in avoiding the creation of an imbalanced society, as all students will at par with each other at least knowledge-wise.
If the government doesn't make the same curriculum a mandate for all, there may be religious fanatics, who would use this latitude, to promote their cause of factious regionalism, and indoctrinate the young minds, pulling them over to the dark side of fundamentalism. A standard syllabus prevents the rise of such divisive fanatics and keeps the balance maintained in the society.Without any uniformity in education, the society will be in a chaos, as the basics of the future citizens will be heavily influenced by parochial religious beliefs.Education is a levelling field for all.
For those students who are excessively keen on pursuing other vocations right from their childhood, should be given the freedom to do so, as long as they simultaneously cover the basics that are required of them.It is important that all children have a modicum of knowledge of civics, mathematics, science, etc.These are the foundation pillars for their future specialisations.
However, there is the flipside to this same national curriculum policy as well. Since we rely on the government to think about the welfare of all, the government shouldn't get biased and start using education to promote a particular leader or focus on a leftist or a capitalist school of thought and manipulate the young minds.This thought process was rife, when the church was supreme and it used to control what is taught and used to cover up controversial theories, that shook the belief of the masses in the church(like Earth is not the centre of the solar system, and earth is not flat etc were subverted for decades by the church). The government should realise its responsibility and move forward in a nonpartisan manner.To ensure this, the education body can comprise of both the government and experts to avoid bias.
Thus, according to the aforementioned paradigms, I agree to the given proposition that all students should study the same national curriculum, until and unless the syllabus is well-crafted and doesn't promote any hidden agenda, or distort the facts.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
hence, however, if, may, so, still, thus, well, at least
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 19.5258426966 138% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.4196629213 113% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 14.8657303371 121% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.3162921348 106% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 33.0505617978 130% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 64.0 58.6224719101 109% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 12.9106741573 139% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2690.0 2235.4752809 120% => OK
No of words: 525.0 442.535393258 119% => OK
Chars per words: 5.12380952381 5.05705443957 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.78673985869 4.55969084622 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9962334632 2.79657885939 107% => OK
Unique words: 271.0 215.323595506 126% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.51619047619 0.4932671777 105% => OK
syllable_count: 836.1 704.065955056 119% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 6.24550561798 208% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 7.0 4.99550561798 140% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.10617977528 225% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 5.0 1.77640449438 281% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.2370786517 64% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 40.0 23.0359550562 174% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 147.437681149 60.3974514979 244% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 206.923076923 118.986275619 174% => OK
Words per sentence: 40.3846153846 23.4991977007 172% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.30769230769 5.21951772744 83% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.97078651685 121% => OK
Language errors: 17.0 7.80617977528 218% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 10.2758426966 78% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.425129641212 0.243740707755 174% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.157709997922 0.0831039109588 190% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.142083365179 0.0758088955206 187% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.224671094265 0.150359130593 149% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.13518596736 0.0667264976115 203% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 22.9 14.1392134831 162% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 30.88 48.8420337079 63% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 18.9 12.1743820225 155% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.3 12.1639044944 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.56 8.38706741573 114% => OK
difficult_words: 131.0 100.480337079 130% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 18.0 11.2143820225 161% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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