Wilderness areas would always be regared as some places where not be exploited yet. It maybe the result of the bad weather, dangerous landform, low yield of soil or some other causes related to living environment. Nevetheless, some wildnerness places may also have some beautiful scenery and others may have abundant natural resources. Thus, it is hard to say whether government should preserve any natural state of these kind of areas. Personally, I'm partially agree with the point that given by the topic.
For some places,without any natural scenery, may be full of natural resources such as coal, oil, natural gas. These kind of places would deserve to be exploited so that the government could achieve more revenue from these natural resources. For example, mineral exporting is the main income for Australia because it has enough mineral resources which is below the desert, grassland and many other wilderness places. Similarly, Russia is well-known for lush natural gas and export it to Europe every year. Natural gas, under the ice in some none-people places, can be seen as a income sources for Russia government. All these examples above indicates that exploiting prospective natural resources in these wilderness districts would be profitable for government and the whole country.
However, in some other places that full of beautiful natural miracle can not be over exploited by government and people. These places may be full of rare animals, plants, insects,and some other endanger species. If the government exploit these places excessively, it maybe a loss for the world and for the all humans to see the dying out about these rare animals. Therefore, these places should be protected by passing law. A counter-example that can demonstrate the important of preserving natural places is the Amazon Rainforest located in Brazil. From the past centuries, it is conspicuous to see that the areas of the foresr is decreasing fast. The desertation of rivers in the rainforest is serious. That is the consequence of overlooking indispensability of protecting natural places.
All in all, for government, it is reasonable to exploit a place in a appropriate way in order to make sure the two-harvest in both economic interests and natural preserving.
- The graph below shows average carbon dioxide (CO2 emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007. 56
- Scientists use living animals to carry out research. Some people think it is interesting, while some others think it is cruel. What is your opinion ? 61
- Nowadays technology is increasingly being used to monitor what people are saying and doing (for example, through cell phone tracking and security cameras). In many cases, the people being monitored are unaware that this is happening.Do you think the advan 78
- Scientists use living animals to carry out research. Some people think it is interesting, while some others think it is cruel. What is your opinion ? 61
- Scientists use living animals to carry out research. Some people think it is interesting, while some others think it is cruel. What is your opinion ? 56
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'this kind' or 'these kinds'?
Suggestion: this kind; these kinds
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
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Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , without
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Message: Did you mean 'this kind' or 'These kinds'?
Suggestion: This kind; These kinds
...sources such as coal, oil, natural gas. These kind of places would deserve to be exploited...
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Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
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Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , and
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Message: Consider replacing "in a appropriate way" with adverb for "appropriate"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
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Suggestion: an
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, look, may, similarly, so, therefore, thus, well, for example, kind of, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.5258426966 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.4196629213 105% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 14.8657303371 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.3162921348 80% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 33.0505617978 70% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 58.6224719101 75% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 12.9106741573 77% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1900.0 2235.4752809 85% => OK
No of words: 363.0 442.535393258 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.23415977961 5.05705443957 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3649236973 4.55969084622 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91939801077 2.79657885939 104% => OK
Unique words: 188.0 215.323595506 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.517906336088 0.4932671777 105% => OK
syllable_count: 605.7 704.065955056 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 6.24550561798 144% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.2370786517 99% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 23.0359550562 78% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 34.6110892634 60.3974514979 57% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 95.0 118.986275619 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.15 23.4991977007 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.85 5.21951772744 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 7.80617977528 102% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 10.2758426966 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.108082787635 0.243740707755 44% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0406617514249 0.0831039109588 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0368995678394 0.0758088955206 49% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0668975184594 0.150359130593 44% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0314186343265 0.0667264976115 47% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 14.1392134831 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 48.8420337079 92% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.1743820225 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.76 12.1639044944 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.62 8.38706741573 103% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 100.480337079 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.8971910112 67% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.2143820225 82% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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