The nature is seriously damaged comparing to the past. So that the attempts to preserve the remained nature is necessary. However, there are two different kinds of countries. First group is developed countries. They are already overly developed. So that, the mandatory actions to reserve the environment seems reasonable. However, if we think of the less developed nations, the same actions appears to be implausible. Because the countries need to be more advanced for their people, at the same time, for establishing the sustainable environmental system with other countries. Moreover, putting on the same duty to preserve nation with the developed countries to the underdeveloped countries is not just. Because they have different responsibility for the environmental condition of nowadays.
In the case the nation is overdeveloped, so that the degree of development treats the sustainable environment, the attempts to preserve the remained wildness are seriously required. Because unless the government do not prohibit the unduly development, then the nature in the region would be irreversibly damaged, in virtue of that the desire to deprive resources recklessly to make profits is a irresistible drive in capitalism society. For example, at the nascent period of industrial revolution, many countries only concentrated on development regardless of the future effect on environment. In result, many European countries had to suffer environmental problems. Only after the legal restrictions were acted, the environment could be recovered.
However, there are not only well-developed countries in the world. When we consider the nations underdeveloped as much as the basic requirements to enjoy civilization are not established, the attempts to preserve the wildness seems to be not implausible. In this case, the development of wildness would be more reasonable for the people. Because the some level of development is needed for man to live as man. Moreover, to build up the sustainable environment which ensures the happiness and utility for people and harmony with other creature over the world at the same time, the development to the certain degree is necessary. Because the energy technology supporting the feasibility of the harmonious environment involves the field of high technologies which are only possible to be invented in the advanced nations. To make sustainable environment require cooperation between all over the world, the underdeveloped countries need to be encouraged to develop their wildness to the certain level.
In addition, it is not fair to imbue same duty to preserve the remained wildness. Because the developed countries at now are responsible for the condition of the damaged environment. With the early industrialization they could secure wealth and power, and they have enjoyed flourish over long period by depriving the resource and potentiality of the less developed countries. In this process, they have influenced negative effect on the environment. In comparing to the countries, the underdeveloped nations have less responsibility for the condition of the polluted nature. Therefore, mandatory actions to preserve the left wildness in the less responsible countries is not righteous measure.
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...ent to the certain degree is necessary. Because the energy technology supporting the fe...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, moreover, so, then, therefore, well, for example, in addition
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 19.5258426966 133% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.4196629213 48% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 14.8657303371 34% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.3162921348 62% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 16.0 33.0505617978 48% => OK
Preposition: 72.0 58.6224719101 123% => OK
Nominalization: 24.0 12.9106741573 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2756.0 2235.4752809 123% => OK
No of words: 492.0 442.535393258 111% => OK
Chars per words: 5.60162601626 5.05705443957 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.70967865282 4.55969084622 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.27790268983 2.79657885939 117% => OK
Unique words: 213.0 215.323595506 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.432926829268 0.4932671777 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 883.8 704.065955056 126% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.59117977528 113% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 6.24550561798 48% => OK
Article: 10.0 4.99550561798 200% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 11.0 3.10617977528 354% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 12.0 4.38483146067 274% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 28.0 20.2370786517 138% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 23.0359550562 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 58.5408892509 60.3974514979 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.4285714286 118.986275619 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.5714285714 23.4991977007 75% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.89285714286 5.21951772744 55% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 5.13820224719 136% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.83258426966 228% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.189776169222 0.243740707755 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0577742649134 0.0831039109588 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0389866836718 0.0758088955206 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.130303274138 0.150359130593 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0184287440186 0.0667264976115 28% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 14.1392134831 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.3 48.8420337079 76% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.1743820225 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.9 12.1639044944 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.3 8.38706741573 99% => OK
difficult_words: 119.0 100.480337079 118% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 11.8971910112 50% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.2143820225 78% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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