"No field of study can advance significantly unless outsiders bring their knowledge and experience to that field of study."
"No field of study can advance significantly unless outsiders bring their knowledge and experience to that field of study."
Advancement in any field of studies will not created if people's of the diffrent class and region do not assemble their study together. This agglomoration of thinking will expand the area of the knowledge owing to being derived from different people with various attiude and thinking created by their condition where they have lived. And, various people have various skills needed to improve the knowledge. Otherwise, undue itnternationally attiude without consdiering local issue may threaten local technological advancement as well.
People with various background of knowledge , and with various experience which have gained according to their condition and social statue can improve any field of the study tremendously. In fact, this different attitude will enable them to asses any aspects of the filed in a way which have not been assested until now. This complete perception of the issue which created by this people teach them someting which not be evaluated by them previously. For example, if skill workers of the different continent, including Asia, Africa, America, and so forth gathered to speak about some issues corralated to international issues like green house effect in the earth, they would find a way to face aginst this problem easily due to their various knowleddge ganied by them accordding to their professor and history. This different view of knowlwddge will show them a way to compensate their side effect which had in the past. Given such varied skills and experience show their main role for expanding knowledge.
advancment in knowledge requires the view in which people can evaluate diffrent aspect of issue. Indeed, this assesment will enable them to expand the scop of the knowledge. To illustaret more, Knowledge has creatd of different aspects, and this various aspect need people with unsimilar attitude toward the issue to expand it completely. If knoledge were limited by some people for investigation, they could not ases any aspect completely, instead this field will be stricted to one aspect. For example, In the field of the biology, people with diiferent skills and experiecne can talk about their different condition which have seen before. This different attitude can expand this field of biology as well.
Aside from foregoing two provisos, I strongly believe that international views may be considered un native and against the local issue owing to be adopted internationally instead of locally. What is important for people of the any country is considering their local issue and problem rather than cosmopolitan one. In fact, the most important aspect of their knowledge is locally issue, and they should expand their knowledge in this type. However, outsider wants to expand it internationally. For example, in the field of the architecture, it is better for Iranian people to focous on their local material, and to expand their knowledge according to them than to concenterate on international material which is not lucrative for them.
In sum, unless local issues are more importand and should be considered by the governer as well as international issue, foreigner can be completely experienced and skill worker to expand the area of the knowledge. On ballance, I firmly agree with the speaker.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 46, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'create'
Suggestion: create
...cement in any field of studies will not created if peoples of the diffrent class and re...
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Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...ple with various background of knowledge , and with various experience which have ...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ed in a way which have not been assested until now. This complete perception of t...
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Line 3, column 377, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...erception of the issue which created by this people teach them someting which not be...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...o compensate their side effect which had in the past. Given such varied skills an...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Advancment
...eir main role for expanding knowledge. advancment in knowledge requires the view in which...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...lance, I firmly agree with the speaker.
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Discourse Markers used:
['however', 'if', 'may', 'so', 'well', 'for example', 'in fact', 'as well as']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.222596964587 0.240241500013 93% => OK
Verbs: 0.151770657673 0.157235817809 97% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0843170320405 0.0880659088768 96% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0674536256324 0.0497285424764 136% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0522765598651 0.0444667217837 118% => OK
Prepositions: 0.128161888702 0.12292977631 104% => OK
Participles: 0.0522765598651 0.0406280797675 129% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.83519403266 2.79330140395 101% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0370994940978 0.030933414821 120% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.0016655270985 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0826306913997 0.0997080785238 83% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0303541315346 0.0249443105267 122% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0168634064081 0.0148568991511 114% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 3395.0 2732.02544248 124% => OK
No of words: 538.0 452.878318584 119% => OK
Chars per words: 6.31040892193 6.0361032391 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.81610080973 4.58838876751 105% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.39219330855 0.366273622748 107% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.2843866171 0.280924506359 101% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.2156133829 0.200843997647 107% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.156133828996 0.132149295362 118% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83519403266 2.79330140395 101% => OK
Unique words: 239.0 219.290929204 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.444237918216 0.48968727796 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 51.8077441707 55.4138127331 93% => OK
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6194690265 112% => OK
Sentence length: 23.3913043478 23.380412469 100% => OK
Sentence length SD: 73.6061403291 59.4972553346 124% => OK
Chars per sentence: 147.608695652 141.124799967 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.3913043478 23.380412469 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.347826086957 0.674092028746 52% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.94800884956 121% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.21349557522 134% => OK
Readability: 51.8299660579 51.4728631049 101% => OK
Elegance: 1.48447204969 1.64882698954 90% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.371224038135 0.391690518653 95% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.117463988213 0.123202303941 95% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0800440071094 0.077325440228 104% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.532267599477 0.547984918172 97% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.176411170673 0.149214159877 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.133897926278 0.161403998019 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.145130274788 0.0892212321368 163% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.39749385717 0.385218514788 103% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.117804040274 0.0692045440612 170% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.325303095772 0.275328986314 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.304174107345 0.0653680567796 465% => Less connections among paragraphs
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 10.4325221239 134% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.30420353982 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88274336283 102% => OK
Positive topic words: 11.0 7.22455752212 152% => OK
Negative topic words: 4.0 3.66592920354 109% => OK
Neutral topic words: 2.0 2.70907079646 74% => OK
Total topic words: 17.0 13.5995575221 125% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 79.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.75 Out of 6
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