Over the past two years, the number of shoppers in Central Plaza has been steadily decreasing while the popularity of skateboarding has increased dramatically.
Many Central Plaza store owners believe that the decrease in their business is due to the number of skateboard users in the plaza.
There has also been a dramatic increase in the amount of litter and vandalism throughout the plaza. Thus, we recommend that the city prohibit skateboarding in Central Plaza.
If skateboarding is prohibited here, we predict that business in Central Plaza will return to its previously high levels.
The following argument is flawed based on the unwarranted assumption that the decreasing business in central plaza is a direct result of an increase in skateboarding, which renders its prediction that business in the central plaza will return to its previously high levels if skateboarding is banned in the plaza.
First of all, central plaza store owners believe that the decrease in their business is due to the number of skateboard users in the plaza. However, there is no existing evidence indicating the decreasing business is a direct result of the skateboard users. For instance, it could be a result of a new shopping mall opening next to the plaza, or the service of central plaza store owners/staff could not satisfy the customers. Moreover, the argument states that skateboarding has increased dramatically, but it does not indicate that the number of skateboard users in the plaza has also increased. More significantly, the argument also does not indicate the location of the skateboarding in the plaza. The skateboard users may use only part of the plaza where distances from those business stores, which seems the impact can be very least compared to skateboarding all over in the plaza and possible to injury customers. if that is the case, it is hard to tell if the skateboarding in the plaza affects the business of central plaza stores.
The argument also leaves other unanswered questions. Even if the number of skateboard users has increased in the plaza, the users may simply enjoy the game and then go home. Nevertheless, the argument assumes that the dramatic increase in the amount of litter and vandalism in the plaza is due to skateboarding in the plaza. Again, there is no direct evidence indicating skateboard users throw litter anywhere and damage the property. it could be a result of drunk customers from pubs in the plaza or some uncivilized tourists who damage the public property and misbehaves in the plaza.
Because the argument makes several unwarranted assumptions, it fails to make a convincing case that the decreasing business in central plaza is due to skateboarding.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, moreover, nevertheless, so, then, for instance, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.5258426966 72% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.4196629213 56% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 14.8657303371 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.3162921348 106% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 33.0505617978 51% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 58.6224719101 73% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 12.9106741573 93% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1787.0 2235.4752809 80% => OK
No of words: 348.0 442.535393258 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.13505747126 5.05705443957 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31911543099 4.55969084622 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95018535104 2.79657885939 105% => OK
Unique words: 150.0 215.323595506 70% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.431034482759 0.4932671777 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 565.2 704.065955056 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.99550561798 140% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.38483146067 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.2370786517 69% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 23.0359550562 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.9827024107 60.3974514979 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 127.642857143 118.986275619 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.8571428571 23.4991977007 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.85714285714 5.21951772744 131% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 10.2758426966 29% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 5.13820224719 214% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.83258426966 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.423553082423 0.243740707755 174% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.175071761943 0.0831039109588 211% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.129934617315 0.0758088955206 171% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.26712852725 0.150359130593 178% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0942969258858 0.0667264976115 141% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.2 14.1392134831 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 48.8420337079 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.1743820225 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.83 12.1639044944 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.0 8.38706741573 95% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 100.480337079 70% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.8971910112 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.2143820225 103% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.