As people rely more and more on technology to solve problems, the ability of humans to
think for themselves will surely deteriorate.
Surely many of us have expressed the following sentiment, or some variation on it, during our daily commutes to work: "people are getting so stupid these days!" Surrounded as we are by striding and strident automatons with cell phones glued to their ears, pda's gripped in their palms, and omniscient, omnipresent CNN gleaming in their eyeballs, it's tempting to believe that technology has isolated and infantilized us, essentally transforming us into dependent, conformist morons best equipped to sideswip one another in our SUV's.
Furthermore, hanging around with the younger, pre-commute generation, whom tech-savviness seems to have rendered lethal, is even less reassuring. With "teen people" style trends shooting through the air from tiger-striped pda to zebra-striped pda, and with the latest starlet gossip zipping from juicy Blackberry to teeny, turbo-charged cell phone, technology seems to support young people's worst tendencies to follow the crowd. Indeed, they have seemingly evolved into intergalactic conformity police. after all, today's tech-aided teens are, courtesy of authentic, hands-on video games, literally trained to kill; courtesy of chat and instant text messaging, they have their own language; they even have tiny cameras to efficiently photodocument your fashion blunders! is this adolescence, or paparazzi terrorist training camp?
With all this evidence, it's easy to believe that tech trends and the incorporation of technological wizardry into our everyday lives have served mostly to enforce conformity, promote dependence, heighten comsumerism and materialism, and generally create a culture that values self-absorption and personal entitlement over cooperation and collaboration. however, I argue that we are merely in the inchoate stages of learning to live with technology while still loving one another. after all, even given the examples provided earlier in this essay, it seems clear that technology hasn't impaired our thinking and problem-solving capacities. certainly it has incapacitated our behavior and manners; certainly our values have taken a severe blow. however, we are inarguably more efficient in our badness these days. we're effective worker bees of ineffectiveness!
If T\technology has so increased our senses of self-efficacy that we can become veritable agents of the awful, virtual CEO's of selfishness, certainly it can be beneficial. Harnessed correctly, technology can improve our ability to think and act for ourselves. The first challenge is to figure out how to provide technology users with some direly-needed direction.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: peoples the worst
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, furthermore, however, if, so, still, then, while, after all, as to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 19.5258426966 51% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 12.4196629213 24% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 14.8657303371 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.3162921348 62% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 43.0 33.0505617978 130% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 54.0 58.6224719101 92% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 12.9106741573 101% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2232.0 2235.4752809 100% => OK
No of words: 382.0 442.535393258 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.84293193717 5.05705443957 116% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.42095241839 4.55969084622 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.2174382998 2.79657885939 115% => OK
Unique words: 256.0 215.323595506 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.670157068063 0.4932671777 136% => OK
syllable_count: 693.9 704.065955056 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.59117977528 113% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.77640449438 281% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 20.2370786517 59% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 31.0 23.0359550562 135% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 172.244658037 60.3974514979 285% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 186.0 118.986275619 156% => OK
Words per sentence: 31.8333333333 23.4991977007 135% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.08333333333 5.21951772744 117% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 7.80617977528 115% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0973062105502 0.243740707755 40% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0399102430853 0.0831039109588 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0362575819 0.0758088955206 48% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0578701637947 0.150359130593 38% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0227016337769 0.0667264976115 34% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 22.0 14.1392134831 156% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 23.09 48.8420337079 47% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 13.0 7.92365168539 164% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 17.7 12.1743820225 145% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 17.18 12.1639044944 141% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 11.04 8.38706741573 132% => OK
difficult_words: 142.0 100.480337079 141% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 60.0 11.8971910112 504% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 14.4 11.2143820225 128% => OK
text_standard: 18.0 11.7820224719 153% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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