We have seen a golden age of technology. A quick reflection of a day reveals how the technology revolutionized out daily life. We usually take automobile to commute to the work or school. The mobile device has been a integrated part of our life, we connect with our friends and family by sending text message or interacting on the social websites. Wikipedia and the search engine offer great help when we are faced with problems in life. Each of these common occurrences could have been inconceivable at the turn of the 19th century.
The statement is trying to link the development of the technology to a reduction of people's ability to think for themselves. Nowadays, people do experience an increased dependence on the technology to solve the problem, thus spending less time thinking by themselves. For example, to solve some math problems including some kind of integration, instead of doing the calculation step by step, some students will chose to copy the problem into the search engine, hoping it will give the right answer. The social website and streaming service takes large amount of time in our daily life, these products are designed to make us addictive and spend as much as time on these websites. A lot of people choose to stay on these website even during the working hours, which is a great setback to the working productivity.
However, the effect of the technology highly depend on how we use it and the reliance on technology does not necessarily prelude the creativity that marks the human species. Some technology greatly frees people by providing more convenience and free time. For example, the advanced traffic network shortens the travel time from one place to another. If people can make full use of these efficiency provided by the technology, they can spend more time in the creative work like art and scientific research.
Using technology to solve our continually complicated problems as a human race is definitely a good thing. Our ability to think for ourselves isn't deteriorating, it's continuing to grow, as long as we know how to use it in right way.
- As people rely more and more on technology to solve problems, the ability of humans to think for themselves will surely deteriorate. 62
- No field of study can advance significantly unless it incorporates knowledge and experience from outside that field 64
- Argument Topic: "The following is taken from a memo from the advertising director of the Super Screen Movie Production Company. "According to a recent report from our marketing department, during the past year, fewer people attended Super Screen-produced 50
- Essay topic: In surveys Mason City residents rank water sports (swimming, boating, and fishing) among their favorite recreational activities. The Mason River flowing through the city is rarely used for these pursuits, however, and the city park department 55
- The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition. Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagre 58
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 216, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...k or school. The mobile device has been a integrated part of our life, we connect...
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Line 3, column 412, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'choose'
Suggestion: choose
...lation step by step, some students will chose to copy the problem into the search eng...
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Line 3, column 716, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this website' or 'these websites'?
Suggestion: this website; these websites
...ites. A lot of people choose to stay on these website even during the working hours, which is...
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Line 5, column 383, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this efficiency' or 'these efficiencies'?
Suggestion: this efficiency; these efficiencies
...nother. If people can make full use of these efficiency provided by the technology, they can sp...
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Line 7, column 143, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: isn't
...ing. Our ability to think for ourselves isnt deteriorating, its continuing to grow, ...
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Line 7, column 163, Rule ID: IT_IS[7]
Message: Did you mean 'it's' (='it is') instead of 'its' (possessive pronoun)?
Suggestion: it's; it is
...think for ourselves isnt deteriorating, its continuing to grow, as long as we know ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, so, thus, for example, kind of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 19.5258426966 36% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 12.4196629213 40% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 14.8657303371 61% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 11.3162921348 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 26.0 33.0505617978 79% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 58.6224719101 89% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 12.9106741573 77% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1744.0 2235.4752809 78% => OK
No of words: 354.0 442.535393258 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.92655367232 5.05705443957 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33761313653 4.55969084622 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79725496191 2.79657885939 100% => OK
Unique words: 200.0 215.323595506 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.564971751412 0.4932671777 115% => OK
syllable_count: 563.4 704.065955056 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.99550561798 140% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.2370786517 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.7355069776 60.3974514979 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.588235294 118.986275619 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.8235294118 23.4991977007 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.52941176471 5.21951772744 48% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 7.80617977528 77% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.215600838122 0.243740707755 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0659788014868 0.0831039109588 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0667538997681 0.0758088955206 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.125577982035 0.150359130593 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0661786720635 0.0667264976115 99% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 14.1392134831 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 48.8420337079 105% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.1743820225 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.31 12.1639044944 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.29 8.38706741573 99% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 100.480337079 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 11.8971910112 63% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 62.5 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.75 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.